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He Will Be Loved (Free verse) by eyrbare His hair is slicked back,
dark roots at his scalp.
A bright heart on his hip.
Sharing his love with Hope, Faith,
Karen,
Sharon.
Falling for Roses,
stabbed with Barbs.
I will be his delicate Dandelion.
A bright, shining, glorious weed of a woman.
Full of love.
Up the ladder:
Ebony shadow
Down the ladder:
Excite
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Posted: August 2, 2004 8:39 PM PDT; Last modified: August 2, 2004 8:39 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.029801 Overall Rank: 7332 Comments:
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leonxic @ 80.205.204.53
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3-Aug-04/6:09 AM
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I hate him already.
I like this quite a bit. Try a line break after "Sharon." Falling for roses and stabbed with barbs is quite nice, reqlly, and recognized.
If Pinnochio had tear ducts he would weep and if I wasn't so lazy I'd rant. *5*
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