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He Will Be Loved (Free verse) by eyrbare

His hair is slicked back, dark roots at his scalp. A bright heart on his hip. Sharing his love with Hope, Faith, Karen, Sharon. Falling for Roses, stabbed with Barbs. I will be his delicate Dandelion. A bright, shining, glorious weed of a woman. Full of love.

Dovina 3-Aug-04/10:38 AM
I like this quite a bit. Try a line break after "Sharon." Falling for roses and stabbed with barbs is quite nice, reqlly, and recognized.




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