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matador (Free verse) by ThePariahDog
disjointed efforts pull effete sinews apart inside the coliseum of sexual contest an ensanguined sheet is waved relentlessly taunting the stubborn beast saline soaked hides give meaning to the matador's intent without spilling the bull's blood he sighs with lament

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.142857
Weighted score: 5.3073616
Overall Rank: 3647
Posted: March 31, 2004 9:40 AM PST; Last modified: March 31, 2004 9:40 AM PST
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[7] baughworm @ 24.145.234.130 | 31-Mar-04/2:32 PM | Reply
too wordy for my tastes.
[7] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 31-Mar-04/8:08 PM | Reply
Feels a tad too "thesorisized".

I think it might need more to bring it back to the human condition (cuz, well - its not really about bulls, is it?)
[n/a] ThePariahDog @ 128.186.126.65 | 2-Apr-04/6:37 AM | Reply
the imagery includes a definitive female presence. a bull's horns resemble the placement of ovaries and its snout can be compared to something else that's wet and slimy. i don't believe that artists should have to explain their works, so i'll say no more.
[8] zodiac @ 152.30.88.96 > ThePariahDog | 2-Apr-04/7:40 AM | Reply
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