Re: The Chaos by Prince of Void	31-Jul-04/7:23 PM
Take Dovina's advice and lose the first satanza
Re: Fragile by QuirkyWonder	31-Jul-04/7:21 PM
See what happens when you post poetry that people don't enjoy reading. You get comments like that. This is better than "Dead" and doesn't have a bad idea behind it, but you need to work on your presentation.
Re: a comment on Dead by QuirkyWonder	31-Jul-04/7:18 PM
"Remember the Day" isn't bad because it's descriptive and can give the reader a picture and an idea of what you're talking about. "Hiding" is okay because it makes a good point, even though its not stated very well, it still says something. This poem is just self loathing and does one of two things to the reader: 1) makes them feel bad for you and therefore they don't care what you're saying 2) makes them mad at you for making them read some depressing crap (in which case they also don't care what you're saying). The thing to remember when posting poetry (and I need to take my own advice sometimes, don't get me wrong) is that you are placing it here for people to read and comment on. If you want them to read it and read your future postings, you have to make it something that they will enjoy reading, or at least remember.
Re: You Can't Kill A Dead Man! by dougsoderstrom	31-Jul-04/7:11 PM
You can't kill dead man. I am not afraid to die. Just don't muss my hair. Really not a Haiku, but I'll give you a 4 for effort.
Re: The wispears of the night by XxRuby_KillsXx	31-Jul-04/7:08 PM
I think if I was walking through a graveyard and the dead people started talking to me, I would get my ass out of there. I've seen way too many scary movies to know that when dead shit starts talking, it's time to go. That, or maybe you just forgot to take your Risperdal this morning...I don't know.
Re: Dead by QuirkyWonder	31-Jul-04/7:04 PM
I realize that things get bad, sometimes, but I truly cannot understand cutters. I understand the concept, but I just really don't get it. I encourage you to change your life if you're not happy with it. As far as the poem goes, it's not very good. I have read some things by you that show promise but this is not it.
Re: Peace that Passes Understanding by Dovina	31-Jul-04/4:19 PM
i.e. - "YOU CANNOT DO WITHOUT ME": You can, it just hurts a little more.
Re: a comment on Barflies and Bombshells by wilco	31-Jul-04/4:17 PM
Yet the web becomes thicker and thicker.
Re: Saturn by Bachus	31-Jul-04/4:08 PM
holy frijoles
Re: a comment on Barflies and Bombshells by wilco	31-Jul-04/4:05 PM
It will drop because she is a smothering psychopath.
Re: The bad news is his bones are like rubber by Venus	28-Jul-04/10:09 AM
Hmmm, something about this that I like, even though it doesn't make any sense to me.
Re: Poor Unwritten Rabbit by Dovina	20-Jul-04/12:30 PM
Silly rabbit.
Re: a comment on Divorcing Tennessee by Dovina	19-Jul-04/10:03 AM
lol.
Re: a comment on Divorcing Tennessee by Dovina	19-Jul-04/9:41 AM
You've already been amongst the arabs too long. You've forgotten how to read, poor thing. You're kind of becoming Zodiac Hussein. Poemrankers tyrannical, structural dictator. I suppose that we must have one though. So, watch yourself over there and don't get kidnapped. You know they will anally rape you while making you read thousands of pages of unstructured, misspelled muslim poetry in a mixture of broken English and...and...that habadibadobi stuff that they speak over there. P.s. - Is syntax not the sexiest word ever?
Re: a comment on Divorcing Tennessee by Dovina	19-Jul-04/9:33 AM
God, I hate condoms. I just have to mention that any time someone mentions them.
Re: Crazy with a Capital K by D. $ Fontera	18-Jul-04/7:58 PM
nope. sorry.
Re: a comment on Paradelle of Progress by Dovina	18-Jul-04/7:52 PM
After some (although most certainly not extensive) research, I have decided that it is not.
Re: I'll Make It Through by cuddlytiger17	18-Jul-04/7:33 PM
You're getting better.
Re: Mr Blobby V skooby doo!! by MR Blobby	17-Jul-04/3:16 PM
bloody hell.
Re: Divorcing Tennessee by Dovina	17-Jul-04/3:15 PM
Captured perfectly and beautifully.