Re: Hoodwinked by Dovina	2-Sep-04/4:55 PM
hogwash? really? For some reason, I tink that word takes away from it...but thats just me. The rest is good though.
Re: Swimming in Space & Fishing for the Luridness Monster by SupremeDreamer	27-Aug-04/8:18 PM
A bit wordy for my taste, but still not too shabby.
Re: A Piñon Planter by Dovina	27-Aug-04/8:16 PM
As I said: Not your best, but still one of the top 5 I've read today (Excluding the Dylan Thomas).
Re: Beached (Or how I learned to give up the day) by Jeremi B. Handrinos	27-Aug-04/8:14 PM
As usual, good job.
Re: St. Patrick’s Cathedral by Dovina	27-Aug-04/8:06 PM
Ok, I'm reading his as someone questioning their faith. That may not be what you're trying to convey, but that's how I read it. It is funny how the Christian fith is so gloomy and dark in nature. I don't understand why it has to have all these depressing icons to build up a point about eternal happiness. Anyway, I think this is a good construcion of te idea: "Searching for the strength to die, without somewhere to go." It's a scary thought that when you die it's all over. That's why religion is important: It gives us a reason to live AND a reason to die.
Re: a comment on Rapid Eye Movement by wilco	27-Aug-04/5:37 PM
I agree that the title is a bit too blatant. I thought about calling it R.E.M., but that seemed wrong for obvious reasons. If you can think of something I'd love to hear it. That one line doesn't seem to read awkwardly to me...maybe it's my southern..ness. I don't know. Either way, I'll play with it and see about a revamped version.I'll think on the title too. Thanks.
Re: Friends by Dovina	19-Aug-04/5:15 PM
As aways, good job. This one lacks a little something, however. Not sure what...
Re: a comment on The 80's by wilco	19-Aug-04/4:45 PM
re: "We’ve become the people we swore we'd never be." Didn't you ever say to yourself as a kid that you would never become an adult? Usually I won't clarify things like this, but for some reason I felt compelled to do so here. I meant that we've become adults and that we never (or at least I never) thought that I would actually become one.
Re: Deep inside silence of a dark breeze by Prince of Void	17-Aug-04/3:41 PM
thats a whole lotta y.
Re: Pomegranate Girl by Caducus	17-Aug-04/3:36 PM
I like this one too, but the rhyme takes away from it, I think.
Re: Lonelier than you- by samuel sturgeon	17-Aug-04/3:32 PM
better than the last one I read. -8-
Re: The Finger of my Mind by sliver	17-Aug-04/3:30 PM
yep, verse 2 is good. I like 3 too, but 2 is better.
Re: Fugitively Speaking by Dovina	17-Aug-04/3:07 PM
very nice, D. Poetic and all that. :0)
Re: Mr. Stryker, Do You Really Want Some Kind of War? by cat	5-Aug-04/11:00 AM
I think that this would be good if it was trimmed down some.
Re: THEY SAY YOU ARE AN ANGEL by massangel62	31-Jul-04/8:02 PM
Therapeutic? Also, you don't have to copyright your poems here.
Re: a comment on The Conception of a Dream by wilco	31-Jul-04/7:59 PM
Oh well. Let he who is without error cast the first insult in my direction. Who will it be?
Re: a comment on The Conception of a Dream by wilco	31-Jul-04/7:56 PM
Incidentally, did you notice the capitalized first letter of each line? Stupid Microsoft Word. Makes it look like I was trying to do some kind of fucked up Acrostic. lol.
Re: a comment on The Conception of a Dream by wilco	31-Jul-04/7:55 PM
nada.
Re: a comment on The Conception of a Dream by wilco	31-Jul-04/7:53 PM
The vague and dreamy outcome of the mixture of Nyquil and Bourbon.
Re: a comment on Someday Soon by Drunk Russian Poet	31-Jul-04/7:51 PM
Because I moved.