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Hoodwinked (Free verse) by Dovina
I’d been humbled before by his sweet-sounding song, but he said he was sorry, this time he’d be true. So, only with caution I lent him a chair, thinking maybe this round he’ll change and be fair. We started our talk with his deep piercing questions, my careful defensives and logical answers. As evening wore on and my guest seemed to soften, I let down my guard, felt cozy and warm, Rested at sunset of umber, amber and gold. Then without warning, he laughed a strong laugh. “Hogwash,” he said, “You’re the dimmest of dim.” For the fifth in five times I’d been hoodwinked again.

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Weighted score: 5.537883
Overall Rank: 2563
Posted: September 2, 2004 11:56 AM PDT; Last modified: September 2, 2004 11:56 AM PDT
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[8] wilco @ 4.226.153.113 | 2-Sep-04/4:55 PM | Reply
hogwash? really? For some reason, I tink that word takes away from it...but thats just me. The rest is good though.
[n/a] Dovina @ 24.52.157.176 > wilco | 2-Sep-04/7:59 PM | Reply
I need a strong word here to show his ridiculous disrespect. It’s amazing how much some women will put up with from a man and still give him another chance. Maybe something like bowl’s.
[8] wilco @ 4.227.44.57 > Dovina | 2-Sep-04/8:09 PM | Reply
My feeling is that men are stupid and women are insane. Makes for a volatile combination. And, yes, I think bow'ls is perfect.
[n/a] Dovina @ 24.52.157.176 > wilco | 2-Sep-04/8:25 PM | Reply
That's a ridiculous generalization. Hey, I keep using that word. Maybe I should just use that word. Hey, thanks.
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