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The Chaos

Member since 2002 · Posted 31 Jul 2004 · 4 comments

The Chaos I see the world with claws of wars Is lost in the waves of chaos The nightmare bothers me the Despair is above me the Shadows follow me I see the images of doom day It took years I become a mystic In the world There is no believer They are just only consumer Within the chaos They live and die So chasing the unwanted dawn Led me find myself as the tiny ray Try to keep the decaying day away As the people become more Hollow then before Shall I be the tiny ray? That can be far from here From the chaos upon the destiny Shall I be the odyssey? Achieving eternity The answer is in infinity

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[7] Dovina 31-Jul-04/2:07 PM Reply

A good idea, but not strongly presented.
I'd like to see the ending be more definitive.

I became a mystic
They are just consumers
Led me to find myself
Trying to keep the decaying day away
As the people become more hollow

[n/a] Prince of Void › Dovina 31-Jul-04/2:31 PM Reply

I agree with you ...thanks for comment ...that really helps me ..

[5] wilco 31-Jul-04/7:23 PM Reply

Take Dovina's advice and lose the first satanza

[n/a] Prince of Void 1-Aug-04/3:31 PM Reply

better saying for that is this below
Despairing seed into this depth of earth that is the arm of chaos