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Poor Unwritten Rabbit (Free verse) by Dovina Driving home with faint hope
searching headlights
will catch a bat
or cloud of insects
whose unwritten lives
may illumine mine.
Beside the road
a naïve rabbit
perfectly still
believes heâs invisible
Up the ladder:
In The Beginning
Down the ladder:
Patio 95
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Posted: July 19, 2004 11:57 AM PDT; Last modified: July 19, 2004 11:57 AM PDTWeighted score: 6.2727275 Overall Rank: 913 The following users have marked this poem on their favorites list:
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I never see rabbits when I'm driving at night unless they are wearing red, reflective tape. You have a good eye.
BTW, I think that the lack of connective tissue between phrases, sentences and images makes for a slower read. It gives the poem time to form in my thoughts and the end is stronger for your style.
Sometimes naievete in rabbits is hard to distinguish from a keen sense for sizing up their predicament.
BTW Thank you
why illumine and not illuminate?
Illumine sounded sweeter. I think they mean the same.
Silly rabbit.
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'ee Bombling breet par facien eeepeee'
becomes this:-
'brazque gumprij ist wozzeling kumwa raosicon nebluspi
mit cucheen ij bloot.'