| Re: Summing Up by Dovina |
18-Feb-05/1:05 PM |
One of your best in a while, D. Kind of a sad, haunting feel to it.
Wow, a 0...Don't think I've ever seen you give one of those before...Either I made you really mad or I posted the worst collection of scribblings ever.
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| Re: Lets recreate hell real properly by Crakyamuni |
17-Feb-05/5:47 PM |
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I like the last three lines and the part about the ghost. the part in the middle you might could work on though.
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| Re: Garage sale by INTRANSIT |
17-Feb-05/5:33 PM |
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Pretty good. Glad to have you back.
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| Re: Christmas Break by Plaidypus |
15-Feb-05/2:16 PM |
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See, ok, you wrote poetry here, and it's pretty good.
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| Re: a comment on Bridesmaids in the Rain by wilco |
15-Feb-05/2:12 PM |
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Geez, I guess I made you mad by not liking your HTML thingie. Sorry.
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| Re: a comment on Love Poem in HTML by Plaidypus |
15-Feb-05/2:11 PM |
1) Experiment away. But don't expect everyone to like it every time.
2) I might find it amusing if I knew something about HTML. I don't. Therefore, I don't find it amusing. Don't get mad at me just because I don't know anything about HTML. I don't imagine that most people do. I'm glad your friend found it funny..but again: HE KNOWS HOW TO WRITE CODE.
3) RE: "I'm not saying its a work of genius, but I am DEFINITELY trying to do something original. I will NOT just "write the poem," thank you very much. All poetry sounds too similar...and I am trying something new." - This sounds very pompous. Perhaps all poetry does sound similar...this is because of something called form. It's always good to try new things, but don't fly off the friggin' handle just because someone doesn't like it.
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| Re: Children in the Storm by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
14-Feb-05/7:55 PM |
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some spelling and punctuation errors, but overall, pretty good. Worth an edit.
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| Re: The Man I Love by Dovina |
14-Feb-05/7:53 PM |
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That's good, because most likely, that's exactly who he's going to be. ;0)
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| Re: Piercings by PsydewaysTears |
14-Feb-05/7:51 PM |
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Too much obviously forced rhyme.
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| Re: a study in blossoms and beauty by oneglove |
14-Feb-05/7:44 PM |
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Way overwritten. You could say this in half the words and make it much better. It is overly..um...mushy, but theres some to salvage here. Just cut it in half.
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| Re: Pillow Talk by horus8 |
14-Feb-05/7:41 PM |
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Yours are always interesting. I'll give you that.
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| Re: Love Poem in HTML by Plaidypus |
14-Feb-05/7:40 PM |
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I'm sorry, but this is just irritating to try to read. I can appreciate you're trying to be original here, but this sort of thing just makes it bad. Just stick to the basics and write the poem.
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| Re: Lent Begins by jessicazee |
14-Feb-05/7:38 PM |
"Her cough sounds like mornings": great.
Good observations here. I actually enjoyed it.
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| Re: Never... by jessicazee |
14-Feb-05/7:35 PM |
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Nice little list of things to never do. I wrote a similar one a while back called "32 Truths and 1 Lie". Some good advice here, but what if you HAVE to stay in one place longer than one hour? Sorry, just giving a hard time. Not too bad.
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| Re: a comment on Prayer of Forgiveness by Dovina |
13-Feb-05/8:39 AM |
Actually I understand some of this comment a little more after reading the comments on "Goodbye". I don't think that you're arrogant and abrasive. You've got your ideas and thats what you write about. Everyone does it. You know as well as I do that people on The Ranker just like to pick at people to see how far they can push them (Bully Poets...there's an odd thing). It's actually funny because if they spent half as much time writintg as they did being assholes, this would be a better place. That's not going to happen though. For some reason they've pretty much stopped with me...either because I've gotten better at writing or because I'm just no fun to taunt because I dont care...I suspect the latter ;). I saw one kid even wrote a poem about you...and it wasn't crass and ignorant..amazed me but you gotta love that. The point is, there's good and there's bad and it's all what makes the poemeranker the best of it's kind.
P.S.-I know you already know all this and I don'y mean to preach to the choir.
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| Re: a comment on Prayer of Forgiveness by Dovina |
13-Feb-05/8:25 AM |
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I completely understand the point of the poem and actually agree with the basis. In fact, though, I think we agree more often than not...maybe just not on religious matters. Also, I was drunk last night and not in the best of moods.
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| Re: Orion takes aim by oneglove |
12-Feb-05/8:41 PM |
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I'm just not getting this. Maybe I'm not trying. Sorry, I just don't care tonight.
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| Re: My Angel by jroday |
12-Feb-05/8:39 PM |
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Sorry. Read the first line and stopped. Some people like the King James English. I don't. We're not living in the 1700's so let's not write like we are. Some people like it, i know so I'll not vote.
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| Re: Blood and roses. by backstreetdreamer |
12-Feb-05/8:34 PM |
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I'd change the end to forever. Not bad overall...
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| Re: dot.com by PodPoet |
12-Feb-05/8:32 PM |
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