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Lets recreate hell real properly (Free verse) by Crakyamuni
A ghost I am, essentially chasing, hunting myself, here and not here "We are" as a complex Dead before I was born Alive before I died Laugh at my mayhem, It's funny like saturday morning cartoons It might sooth your bloodlust My emptiness rejoice at this for knowing is sorrow Borrow these mishaps and reshape your maintainence for we all have the wisdom to know the difference but never the power to achieve the mean.

Up the ladder: Superfuture
Down the ladder: spiritually driven

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.5
Weighted score: 4.928861
Overall Rank: 9243
Posted: February 17, 2005 5:43 PM PST; Last modified: February 17, 2005 5:43 PM PST
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[7] wilco @ 24.165.207.93 | 17-Feb-05/5:47 PM | Reply
I like the last three lines and the part about the ghost. the part in the middle you might could work on though.
[n/a] Crakyamuni @ 131.252.181.231 > wilco | 17-Feb-05/6:11 PM | Reply
I think your right. The middle is contrived. thanks.
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