on Dreamtigers (Borges) by Sasha
12 Feb 2005, 8:29 PM
I like it, but I'm guessing it's a translation. Now, I can respect the work you put into a translation, but I don't feel that's it's an original work (and I've heard the debates.) Good job, but I will hold my vote.
P.S.-If I'm wrong and it's an original, let me know and I'll vote.
P.S.-If I'm wrong and it's an original, let me know and I'll vote.
on Valentine's Day is Two Days Away and I Don't Feel Loved by MacFrantic
12 Feb 2005, 8:25 PM
Not loving the poem so much, but I like the title a lot. So, *7*.
on Prayer of Forgiveness by Dovina
12 Feb 2005, 8:24 PM
Reminds me of...oh, whats that thing from church...about forgiving those who trespass....I don;t know....been a long time. Anyway, I think that this was a "I need something to post poem (sorry, not trying to be mean). I just know what you're capable of and I expect more. You know I got much love for ya. ;)
on The Sleep Fantastic by nentwined
10 Feb 2005, 4:32 PM
super.
on Suicide..... by *.*ReAdY To SnAp*.*
10 Feb 2005, 4:30 PM
Ok, Ready To Snap (forgive me for not going to all the trouble of putting the stars and things in):
1) Check your spelling and punctuation before you post. It makes it hard when the reader is trying to figure out if you lost your fate or your Fiat...and exactly how you lose fate in the first place.
2) When you post poetry, you're hoping that people will read and enjoy it, right? Well, when you write about how much you hate your life and want to kill yourself, people don't enjoy it. Sure, I know it helps to write and vent your feelings. I'm just saying that noone wants to read a poem about it unless it's REALLY well worded to a point where you have to think about it to figure it out (and even then, a lot of people don't).
3) Try reading some other poetry before you write. Get an idea of how to use meter and rhyme. When you force rhymes (as you did here) it makes the poem harder to follow and basically reveals the fact that you don't know what your doing. And I don't mean search for poems with suicide in the title, or read two or three...I mean really read and comprehend and learn (and just because it's on the Poemranker Best List or has a 6 or 7 rating doesn't mean it's good.)
4) People talk shit about your poetry and say mean things because that's the way it is on Poemranker. That's as simply as I can put it. If you're going to post here, get used to it. Occasionally, you'll get an honest critique, but mostly you're going to have people call you a dunce.
5) They think this poem is awful because it is. Now, before you go getting your feelings hurt, know this: Most of the poems on here are awful, my own included. That's why we're posting them here instead of making money having them published.
Maybe you'll take this and work on your writing and actually get tobe good. I hope you do. Or, maybe you'll say I'm an idiot and I'm mean and just go on posting rambling poems that get lost in the shuffle as most people do. Either way, good luck.
1) Check your spelling and punctuation before you post. It makes it hard when the reader is trying to figure out if you lost your fate or your Fiat...and exactly how you lose fate in the first place.
2) When you post poetry, you're hoping that people will read and enjoy it, right? Well, when you write about how much you hate your life and want to kill yourself, people don't enjoy it. Sure, I know it helps to write and vent your feelings. I'm just saying that noone wants to read a poem about it unless it's REALLY well worded to a point where you have to think about it to figure it out (and even then, a lot of people don't).
3) Try reading some other poetry before you write. Get an idea of how to use meter and rhyme. When you force rhymes (as you did here) it makes the poem harder to follow and basically reveals the fact that you don't know what your doing. And I don't mean search for poems with suicide in the title, or read two or three...I mean really read and comprehend and learn (and just because it's on the Poemranker Best List or has a 6 or 7 rating doesn't mean it's good.)
4) People talk shit about your poetry and say mean things because that's the way it is on Poemranker. That's as simply as I can put it. If you're going to post here, get used to it. Occasionally, you'll get an honest critique, but mostly you're going to have people call you a dunce.
5) They think this poem is awful because it is. Now, before you go getting your feelings hurt, know this: Most of the poems on here are awful, my own included. That's why we're posting them here instead of making money having them published.
Maybe you'll take this and work on your writing and actually get tobe good. I hope you do. Or, maybe you'll say I'm an idiot and I'm mean and just go on posting rambling poems that get lost in the shuffle as most people do. Either way, good luck.
replying on Epitaph of Innocence by woodstock20000
10 Feb 2005, 4:08 PM
Like a good little boy, I only pray when I REALLY, REALLY want something from the big guy.
on Separation by Dovina
10 Feb 2005, 4:04 PM
As I've said before, I'm not a big fan of the Bible poems. This is mainly because I am wholly uneducated regarding Christianity, and mainly because what I have learned about it is utter bollocks. Due to my limited knowledge of the subject matter, I'll hold my vote.
replying on Separation by Dovina
10 Feb 2005, 4:02 PM
are you that thick? I didn't think you were.
on Rebecca, by Firelight by villy_zee_vanker
3 Feb 2005, 5:02 PM
Title is much better than before. -8-
replying on Pictures of June by wilco
3 Feb 2005, 4:13 PM
better?
replying on Pictures of June by wilco
3 Feb 2005, 4:12 PM
Yeah, i had you pegged as the kinda gal who likes it straightforward. Some of it is kind of odd...and you are right that the second line isn't a sentence. It's a song though...sometimes you gotta scrap the rules...and actually, the semicoln shouldn't be there...
on On Being Born by emilyowey
3 Feb 2005, 3:55 PM
I like this. Sad and lovely, in my eyes anyway.
on An Ice Revelation by Nateislate
3 Feb 2005, 3:53 PM
I don't think this is really ten-worthy, but I'm going to give you one just because it looks like you were hit with some retaliatory zeros for something.
on Ceylon Cries by Mona Lisa
3 Feb 2005, 3:48 PM
okay, I'll buy that.
replying on Pictures of June by wilco
3 Feb 2005, 3:40 PM
That is the point. You only like the first line?
This actually goes with "Waiting for October" and another that will be my next post. A trilogy, I guess.
This actually goes with "Waiting for October" and another that will be my next post. A trilogy, I guess.
Note-200 years ago, I'd have given it an 8.