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Valentine's Day is Two Days Away and I Don't Feel Loved

Member since 2003 · Posted 12 Feb 2005 · 3 comments

Those eyes The depths they see Her charming come-hithers Embracing me Now there Does she now look past? Am I to be forgotten? This fragile heart Lost among them forgotten?

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[7] wilco 12-Feb-05/8:25 PM Reply

Not loving the poem so much, but I like the title a lot. So, *7*.

[6] brazen 13-Feb-05/1:24 AM Reply

i like the first stanze, but it is all a little too random for me...though i admit to being just as random.

[7] Dovina 14-Feb-05/3:17 PM Reply

"Her charming come-hithers" is good. The rest so-so.