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Valentine's Day is Two Days Away and I Don't Feel Loved (Free verse) by MacFrantic Those eyes
The depths they see
Her charming come-hithers
Embracing me
Now there
Does she now look past?
Am I to be forgotten?
This fragile heart
Lost among them
forgotten?
Up the ladder:
What it Feels Like
Down the ladder:
Under the Spoon
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Posted: February 12, 2005 8:22 PM PST; Last modified: February 12, 2005 8:22 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.0896473 Overall Rank: 6229 Comments:
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wilco @ 24.165.207.93
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12-Feb-05/8:25 PM
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Not loving the poem so much, but I like the title a lot. So, *7*.
i like the first stanze, but it is all a little too random for me...though i admit to being just as random.
"Her charming come-hithers" is good. The rest so-so.
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