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Valentine's Day is Two Days Away and I Don't Feel Loved (Free verse) by MacFrantic

Those eyes The depths they see Her charming come-hithers Embracing me Now there Does she now look past? Am I to be forgotten? This fragile heart Lost among them forgotten?

Dovina 14-Feb-05/3:17 PM
"Her charming come-hithers" is good. The rest so-so.




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