| Re: Las Gaviotas by Bachus |
28-Apr-05/8:39 PM |
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I hate to admit I like this, but I do.
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| Re: Addicted by berdabear |
17-Sep-04/8:11 AM |
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| Re: Me by berdabear |
17-Sep-04/8:00 AM |
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You start off on the wrong foot by saying attatchment is all it can be, is there no room for growth? Still, I like it. Also, I imagine all of you IS everything to the right one.
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| Re: a comment on Paid In Full by NoSage |
16-Jun-04/7:37 PM |
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Hmm, didn't even think of that. Just thinking about him.
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| Re: Highschool in My Head by MacFrantic |
10-May-04/9:19 PM |
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Oh yes, I'm sure you'll go far. Don't drop the glasses.
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| Re: Small made Large by tadpole |
27-Nov-03/9:04 PM |
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Well, I wish I had the energy to experience that pain.
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| Re: Holding on for Jesus by Everyone |
27-Nov-03/8:32 PM |
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You know man, Salvation isn't easy. I hope you have the strength to hold on, it's a rough ride, and everyone seems to want to pull you off.
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| Re: 0 by MacFrantic |
27-Nov-03/8:26 PM |
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My my, aren't we full of ourselves?
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| Re: Mirror to Mirror by Roisin |
12-Nov-03/7:38 PM |
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Yea, that'll show'er. well spoken, I wish I had read it before the edit, so I'd know how you've spread it
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| Re: Mingy by willosh salkeldosh |
12-Nov-03/7:16 PM |
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I guess I need to be somewhere else to understand this. As it is it does nothing for me, but I'm too kind to try that 0, therefore 4.
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| Re: Crampa by horus8 |
12-Nov-03/7:14 PM |
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Sounds like a whiskey drinker. sad. I like the haiku tho.
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| Re: a comment on Giving up on Coke by Katzclear |
10-Nov-03/6:21 PM |
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If that were the case I would be in a serious dilemma.
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| Re: Giving up on Coke by Katzclear |
10-Nov-03/5:53 PM |
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Soda gives you zits, try something else.
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| Re: My First Love Proposal by ShaNoN+960317485 |
10-Nov-03/5:45 PM |
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The rhyme scheme seems to break apart at apparently random intervals. Perhaps intentionally? still, I like the morbidity, it appeals to me.
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| Re: submission to decay by FreeFormFixation |
10-Nov-03/5:17 PM |
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A good reminder of our mortality, the first line really set the tone, but it confuses my simple mind. Fragments of what skull? still, a well written piece.
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| Re: paint me a poem with pictures by nentwined |
10-Nov-03/5:05 PM |
Picture me a poem with the paint of a mind,
give me a beauty that will last through time,
rhyme me a reason to forestall all doubt,
dribble me words to sustain me throughout.
Nothing major, it seems to flow better like this
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| Re: a comment on paint me a poem with pictures by nentwined |
10-Nov-03/4:43 PM |
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Yes, Sliver has brought me kindof up to date on that, I just found out today that he writes and I was pleasantly surprised with a few of his. What do you think of finishing the poem with /sustain me throughout/then find a way to change L2?
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| Re: paint me a poem with pictures by nentwined |
10-Nov-03/4:16 PM |
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Very well done. Finally, a poet.I was wondering if I might find one here.
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| Re: Waste Of Time by Miggy |
10-Nov-03/3:48 PM |
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Not a complete waste of time, you hit on a few good points. Your rhymes sounded a little forced at times, but all in all-not too shabby.
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| Re: As I sit alone by baby_d |
10-Nov-03/3:46 PM |
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Apostrophe misplaced. I think I see what you were trying to do here. Try again.
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