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Las Gaviotas (Villanelle) by Bachus
There is a burning moon in Mexico Love and blood go hand in hand So deep and high, I can't let go It rises red, It's sky crawl slow A bulging middle with golden band There is a burning moon in Mexico Drunk, I watch the ebb tide flow Where waves wash away at the land So deep and high, I can't let go A guitar song with black pearls so consumed with guilt I cannot stand There is a burning moon in Mexico She hangs there naked, all a glow Over an Ocean of silence and sand So deep and high, I can't let go In the distance, a storm does grow Spinning eye pull, strand by strand There is a burning moon in Mexico So deep and high, I can't let go.

Down the ladder: overwhelmed

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Weighted score: 6.9999986
Overall Rank: 85
Posted: July 15, 2003 6:15 PM PDT; Last modified: July 15, 2003 6:15 PM PDT
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Comments:
[9] zzinnia66 @ 167.206.181.179 | 16-Jul-03/11:15 AM | Reply
pretty, so pretty.
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 > zzinnia66 | 16-Jul-03/3:56 PM | Reply
Yeah, I guess.
[10] Quarton @ 12.217.221.61 > Bachus | 16-Mar-04/10:26 AM | Reply
A vilanelle is difficult at best and near impossible to write
without sounding forced due to the very strict rules required.
I have tried this form and have had no positive results. You
seem to have pulled it off quite well. In both form and content,
a solid ten.
[10] Luzr @ 66.213.67.10 | 1-Apr-04/8:56 AM | Reply
Damn. Now that's Verse!
[10] unouluvme @ 66.167.223.251 | 2-Apr-04/4:01 PM | Reply
REALLY REALLY nice!
[10] Christof @ 217.44.71.65 | 8-Apr-04/7:03 AM | Reply
It's been on the site so long and I've never seen it. t's great, really beautiful and delicate. This is tops.
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.130.214.180 > Christof | 8-Apr-04/1:03 PM | Reply
Thanks Christof, it's always a delight to hear from you, I hope all is well with you these days?
[2] Stephen Robins @ 213.146.148.199 | 20-Apr-04/1:31 AM | Reply
A satchel of pump.
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.130.62.63 > Stephen Robins | 29-Jul-04/10:02 PM | Reply
A canteen of plump
[10] Ranger @ 62.252.32.15 > Bachus | 27-Sep-06/3:46 PM | Reply
A holster of chump
[0] unnesessary @ 64.12.116.140 | 10-Sep-04/10:24 PM | Reply
You still suck!!!!
[9] NoSage @ 207.200.116.130 | 28-Apr-05/8:39 PM | Reply
I hate to admit I like this, but I do.
[10] Ranger @ 62.252.32.15 | 27-Sep-06/3:45 PM | Reply
So this has been one of my favourite ranker poems for the last year or so, it was the chief inspiration behind every villanelle that I've ever written, and yet I haven't commented or voted on it until now? This is the best vil. on poemranker, and then some. Whenever I think of the form, I always think of this. -10- and favourited.
[0] mr cunt @ 85.210.204.236 | 2-Mar-07/6:01 PM | Reply
Illiterate, ungrammatical tripe. Why not learn some English, you silly asshole? You can't even spell your own pen name. Mongol.
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