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My First Love Proposal

Member since 2003 · Posted 10 Nov 2003 · 4 comments

As I open, a shutter close Maw search for the lost words As out come meaningless clause Punctuation’s and senseless pause A smile I stretch, forms a sneer Chunks of food there held by the cusp Along with the whiff of the last sup Rode snarled in wind-mare’s husk Eyes held, a stare stormed Veins of desire in web ensnared Pupil in eternal dilute stare Peeked the lines of oceans tear My hands waved, to paint the air But to it I flourished much confuse stock As in its dear flight came a stroke To cheek that broke into break a revoke Needless to speak, gainless to be told That a monster of her I hath mold The Angel bound in vicious hulk hold That spared my neck but staved my adore

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[n/a] ShaNoN+960317485 10-Nov-03/6:06 AM Reply
Hope such fell ideas never occure 2 me again:o)
[9] NoSage 10-Nov-03/5:45 PM Reply
The rhyme scheme seems to break apart at apparently random intervals. Perhaps intentionally? still, I like the morbidity, it appeals to me.
[9] deleted user 10-Nov-03/10:05 PM Reply
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[n/a] ShaNoN+960317485 › deleted user 11-Nov-03/8:05 PM Reply
I gather this has happened 2 u:o)