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Paid In Full (Ode) by NoSage What would you think
If you were here?
Would you even blink?
Or maybe shed a tear.
Fourty eight years
Gone in a flash.
And now your greatest fear
Is coming true at last.
Your children are lost,
They will not stand strong
You fear you will pay the cost.
But that would be wrong.
You can't be responsible
For the decisions they've made.
Their lives have been full,
Their father made the grade.
So rest now in peace,
Leave them to their designs.
You have paid up your lease,
They will find their way in time.
Up the ladder:
Dancing and Talking
Down the ladder:
BW
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Posted: June 16, 2004 7:07 PM PDT; Last modified: June 16, 2004 7:07 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.3697944 Overall Rank: 3266 Comments:
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Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177
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16-Jun-04/7:33 PM
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father's day?
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NoSage @ 63.190.81.28
> Shuushin
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16-Jun-04/7:37 PM
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Hmm, didn't even think of that. Just thinking about him.
This is dreadful, and in very poor taste. "Paid up your lease"? what an awful analogy.
It is true that they will find their way in time. I liked the thought put into this one. I didn't care for their father made the grade. I sounds to cocky. But all in all very interesting thought process.
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