on hands by New Life Drug
31 Mar 2004, 9:56 PM
Yeah, that works.
on A Dangling Poo by zodiac
31 Mar 2004, 8:36 PM
Dust off the geetar, grab yer jamming buddy M.G. and you just might have a HIT - call your agent!
I gotta say though, nobody does the [browne] like -=DA=-
I gotta say though, nobody does the [browne] like -=DA=-
replying on I Married an Infectious Woman (My Love, 'Futility') by SupremeDreamer
31 Mar 2004, 8:31 PM
"Ass Poetica" - nice!
In my continuing search to "get" -=DA=- I have read each and every one of his posts, including the one's he's deleted and prolly 90% of the comments.
BTW, PLEASE Mr. -=A=-, if you read this - please will you repost "Love Letter to Crystal Lane Swift"????
that was truly a masterverk - I shit you not.
In my continuing search to "get" -=DA=- I have read each and every one of his posts, including the one's he's deleted and prolly 90% of the comments.
BTW, PLEASE Mr. -=A=-, if you read this - please will you repost "Love Letter to Crystal Lane Swift"????
that was truly a masterverk - I shit you not.
on I Have A Love by Spindle
31 Mar 2004, 8:24 PM
(no title in body please).
Actually a little twist there in the second to last line. Sounds (the situation) so wonderful but then there is this little shadow of doubt (the quarreling).
Would be nice to exploit this more. Something like "He's so thoughtful and kind and everything is so wonderful except for the way he stares at my sister's ass when he thinks I don't see" kindof thing.
Actually a little twist there in the second to last line. Sounds (the situation) so wonderful but then there is this little shadow of doubt (the quarreling).
Would be nice to exploit this more. Something like "He's so thoughtful and kind and everything is so wonderful except for the way he stares at my sister's ass when he thinks I don't see" kindof thing.
on Watching The Rose Grow by Blindpoetry
31 Mar 2004, 8:19 PM
nicely and subtly rhymed.
EXCEPT HOBBY/LOBBY - god, fix that please.
EXCEPT HOBBY/LOBBY - god, fix that please.
on Over Simplification by Richard
31 Mar 2004, 8:15 PM
prolly a good performance piece; it makes interesting sounds.
on A wicked rose grows in God's grapevine. by SupremeDreamer
31 Mar 2004, 8:12 PM
Try a version of this that isn't in the first person, see if you still buy it.
(I'm not saying you won't, but it might help refine the thought).
(I'm not saying you won't, but it might help refine the thought).
on matador by ThePariahDog
31 Mar 2004, 8:08 PM
Feels a tad too "thesorisized".
I think it might need more to bring it back to the human condition (cuz, well - its not really about bulls, is it?)
I think it might need more to bring it back to the human condition (cuz, well - its not really about bulls, is it?)
on Tuna and sweetcorn by Bobjim
31 Mar 2004, 8:03 PM
woah. thats deep.
on Astronomical by DeadtotheWorld
31 Mar 2004, 8:02 PM
I'm sorry but I have trouble with the format. Enought that I have trouble getting through it.
I think it might have something to do with the sushi I just had.
I think it might have something to do with the sushi I just had.
on The Hell With Growing Up by wilco
31 Mar 2004, 8:01 PM
I think it represents a good snapshot of a frame of mind in the moment just before one "grows up" (whatever that is) - this exact feeling.
You may be surprised, and perhaps relieved, to know that there is still a bit to go and you won't spend your entire life wishing for misspent youth.
As a slight aside, there is a recent study where folks aged 65 and older were asked what their favorite age was - 40-41 was the most cited result.
You may be surprised, and perhaps relieved, to know that there is still a bit to go and you won't spend your entire life wishing for misspent youth.
As a slight aside, there is a recent study where folks aged 65 and older were asked what their favorite age was - 40-41 was the most cited result.
on Twilight Affair by thepinkbunnyofdoom
31 Mar 2004, 6:12 PM
"opera of obscenities" - nice.
Yes, an edit once the emotion has leveled out a bit would be good for it; a nice distillation.
Yes, an edit once the emotion has leveled out a bit would be good for it; a nice distillation.
Pretty nice, calliope.
This is an entirely different style (etc.), but have you read "the old fools" by philip larkin?
http://plagiarist.com/poetry/?wid=4879
oh, I just read baughworm's crit on the title - agreed.
This is an entirely different style (etc.), but have you read "the old fools" by philip larkin?
http://plagiarist.com/poetry/?wid=4879
oh, I just read baughworm's crit on the title - agreed.
on Ideals drown Worries by skaskowski
31 Mar 2004, 5:53 PM
well done - okay, I don't like "sticky" with "Stuck".
Have a ten anyway.
Have a ten anyway.
on A country called Cha by richa
31 Mar 2004, 5:49 PM
Richa mein freund - I grow familiar with your Australian abstractions; good stuff.
nits-
"beared"? bore?
"entered the picture" - seems like a missed poetic opportunity.
nits-
"beared"? bore?
"entered the picture" - seems like a missed poetic opportunity.