poemranker ::Mariana by wilco

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Free verse № 91011

Mariana

Member since 2004 · Posted 20 Feb 2004 · Edited 31 Mar 2004 · 6 comments

She bleeds life like a sieve Only slightly crazy, But most assuredly insane. Entrancing with her movement, Given to the moment And taken like a wasted breath. She laughs like the ocean moves, Breaking on the shoreline And giving in to the incessant call. A tiny bit of honeysuckle rose Floating past the farmhouse In the warm southern twilight. Lying between the blades of grass, Without a sound And breaking apart the heavens. She grasps at the seams of her dress Glowing in the fields And dancing with a shadows grace. She’s a little piece of moonlight Riding the nighttime And playing in the atmosphere. A narrow light contrasting the dark Smiling in a knowing way And dodging the darkness between fireflies She came, rushing like a cannonball Without regard for simple things And fading faster than I had hoped Leaning slowly closer to my ear, Whispering caustic words of love And saving me from myself.

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6 comments

[9] Shuushin 31-Mar-04/8:26 PM Reply
"caustic words of love"... interesting.

some nice/interesting images/similies
[8] New Life Drug 31-Mar-04/10:07 PM Reply
nice images. i love the word caustic. it reminds me of this band "Caustic Notions" but thats beside the point. this sounds like something i would write, therefore, i like it.
[8] richa 1-Apr-04/8:20 AM Reply
Some of the similes and metaphors, because they are not extended through the poeme, can be confusing.

Some interesting ones though.
[10] deleted user 1-Apr-04/4:32 PM Reply
I like this one a lot, somewhereman.
[9] Dovina › deleted user 24-Aug-04/5:52 PM Reply
I also like this one a lot, compliant Wil.
[8] Mystictwilight 14-Sep-04/9:30 PM Reply
This one is really good