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Suicide Girl

Member since 2004 · Posted 16 Apr 2004 · Edited 17 Apr 2004 · 12 comments

Never knew just where to draw the line. Always waking up too late. She’s a little dull at times. Light her on fire so she can shine. She turns away like the evening sun Only for a minute then she’s gone. She says it’s all she ever wanted But maybe that’s not the hardest one Sit down and crack a smile to laugh Pouring thoughts into your little green book. I’ll be your Elliot Smith If you’ll be my Sylvia Plath. Chorus: The greatest thing in all the world, Please don’t be my suicide girl. She’s something of charity case With a bottle of Zoloft and a Miller Light. Always giving up her life. To anyone with time to waste. Plain as day but sexy at night Dancing like an epileptic willow tree. She’s the ending of the story If the book is Wuthering Heights. Cornered in a snowstorm she calls her life. Fading fast and learning slow. Crying about the things gone wrong. A manic-depressive cheerleaders’ midwife. The greatest thing in all the world, Please don’t be my suicide girl.

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12 comments

[8] zodiac 17-Apr-04/6:44 AM Reply
For everyone who doesn't already know, Elliott Smith committed suicide by stabbing himself in the chest with a knife.
[9] Shuushin 17-Apr-04/9:18 AM Reply
i really think you could improve the broken car simile - other than that, really well done.
[n/a] wilco › Shuushin 17-Apr-04/9:05 PM Reply
better? no? well.....
[9] Shuushin › wilco 18-Apr-04/5:23 AM Reply
yep - hey, I have another suggestion, for what its worth -

the verb "to be" is weak weak weak in your hook line. How bout kill? "Please don’t [kill] my suicide girl"
[n/a] wilco › Shuushin 18-Apr-04/7:46 AM Reply
hmmm...let me ponder that for a while...
[9] Shuushin › wilco 18-Apr-04/8:05 AM Reply
either way - good stuff, nwman.

Mmmmm Zoloft is delicious (I personally don't touch the stuff)
[7] titan69 18-Apr-04/12:38 AM Reply
some great lines. But lacked somthing i feel
[9] deleted user 18-Apr-04/8:37 AM Reply
Best line: "Fading fast and learning slow."
S3 doesn't quite fit, seems to conflict with the chorus. I can picture this girl, and that makes it good poem.
[10] Tara57 18-Apr-04/11:11 PM Reply
I would give you a ten for this line alone...
I’ll be your Elliot Smith
If you’ll be my Sylvia Plath
But then you go on to write several more stand out lines...I loved it!
[n/a] wilco 9-May-04/9:03 AM Reply
I'm curious as to why someone would log in under 3 different user names just to give this three fives. Can you really hate something that badly as to want to waste that much time? or maybe you are three different people who live together. Either way, it's cool...I was just wondering.
[n/a] sliver 8-Jun-04/4:41 PM Reply
A ten, for the quality, and another for those 5's
[n/a] wilco › sliver 8-Jun-04/4:56 PM Reply
That wasn't really what I was going for, but thanks.