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Astronomical (Other) by DeadtotheWorld
Their is this man I know who sleeps all day and walks all night He loves the feeling of the crippling dark backgrounds that surround him For he knows many are intimated by surreal sounds of evil and dismay Unsatisfied with the way things have been and are continuing to go this man takes a vow; he vows to himself that everyone will soon feel his wrath and his pain, The same pain that has cursed his every step, his every flinch, his every touch He wants revenge on what was taking from him, nothing can stop him Nothing will but an end to his bitter and undeniable cold hatred for the society that Has wickedly tattered yet torn and shaped him into the beast he is today the unthinkable thoughts that this man has brewed up in his mind are yet to be released upon us Many will attempt to end to his vile rule and his odious way of judging things I doubt that anyone will be able to dethrone this malevolence For you have the power to, but you must choose to give it all up and put and end to this hell And to lose your life in the process because there is no will saying you will make it out alive Many know if you choose to attempt this you will die, then of course your other choice is to Continue with your regular routine, to continue with your pathetic excuse for a live, so I say Save the world, get laid in the process by the beauty next store that you will never see again, But hey your live to save others, become a global hero, you will gain a reputation after your death because god knows you didn’t have one before

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.2222223
Weighted score: 6.111111
Overall Rank: 1108
Posted: March 30, 2004 10:22 PM PST; Last modified: March 30, 2004 10:22 PM PST
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[5] zodiac @ 67.240.211.7 | 31-Mar-04/8:27 AM | Reply
Running a Bible-Code-inspired equidistant letter search on this poem, I found:
7 instances of the word ANUS,
248 of ASS,
10 of ARSE,
12 TWATS,
5 CUNTS,
1 LORD,
1 SATAN,
1 PENIS, &
1 GUFF.

I now firmly believe that though you may be dead to the world, you're utterly alive to the heavenly wisdom of Jesus. We'll be in touch.
[7] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 31-Mar-04/8:02 PM | Reply
I'm sorry but I have trouble with the format. Enought that I have trouble getting through it.

I think it might have something to do with the sushi I just had.
[n/a] DeadtotheWorld @ 12.72.83.222 > Shuushin | 31-Mar-04/8:09 PM | Reply
yeah sorry about that format
[7] richa @ 81.178.243.245 | 1-Apr-04/8:38 AM | Reply
Could do with being shortened, would help to manage the rhythm.
[n/a] DeadtotheWorld @ 12.72.81.109 > richa | 1-Apr-04/6:08 PM | Reply
I wasn't trying to rhythm, more like tell a story and get a message across
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