Re: ode to summer dreams by jsd	2-Apr-04/6:08 PM
"put a little love in this hole" Thats Pr0n, right?
Re: The Day The World Blew Away by OfaRevolutionAJD	2-Apr-04/5:25 PM
Five gallons in a ten gallon hat.
Re: a comment on To those who'd share their heartfelt feelings with the world by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	2-Apr-04/2:04 PM
and shrubbery.
Re: a comment on Cargo pants by tre	2-Apr-04/9:50 AM
you are a bad man.
Re: a comment on A Dangling Poo by zodiac	1-Apr-04/8:25 PM
I don't get it.
Re: Don't Cry, Sharon Tate by wilco	1-Apr-04/8:22 PM
I forgot who sharon tate was. Don't make me google. Sounds good anyway though.
Re: PEOPLE. (Debut) by Doc	1-Apr-04/8:18 PM
Yuppy, or hippy? Got my attention, gimme more you commie bastard. Oh, crap - did I say that out loud?
Re: a comment on Watching The Rose Grow by Blindpoetry	1-Apr-04/6:13 PM
you gonna fix this so I can give it a score? or what.
Re: Cargo pants by tre	1-Apr-04/6:12 PM
"sorority" Sure, I get it.
Re: Chemistry by <Wankster>	1-Apr-04/6:09 PM
Four spelling errors. Is the ending counter-intuitive, or am I missing something?
Re: My Apology by capachijim	1-Apr-04/6:06 PM
yep. that works.
Re: Color me Lifeless by alverland theme park	1-Apr-04/6:05 PM
Sad, but - thankfully - short (this kind of thing can get old quickly)
Re: lullaby by the indign	1-Apr-04/6:01 PM
too "listy" - yes, I made that word up. Gimme so flow, gimme some "poetry".
Re: Leaves, hope and dreams by aliena	1-Apr-04/5:58 PM
hey aliena, good descriptors - now you just need to say something with them.
Re: Municipal park by richa	1-Apr-04/3:35 PM
Hmmm. Strong methinks - strong. and "have" should be "have" - you knew that, right?
Re: Jesus-f-ingChrist I'm Sober by embersandenvelopes	1-Apr-04/3:31 PM
sheep is as sheep does. not baaaa-ahd.
Re: a comment on Leaves, hope and dreams by aliena	1-Apr-04/10:59 AM
lol
Re: Shampoo and Condition by Luzr	1-Apr-04/10:21 AM
Wondering if you could somehow structure the thing to not sound like a shopping list of ennui; to flow a little better. couple good lines, the starting one in particular. But there are a few things that nag, like why dress to impress when there is vomit on ones face? I mean, other than the line _sounds_ cute - (maybe better in another poem, but then thats been done already I think). There's prolly a very nice poem in here after a little distillation.
Re: a comment on Bread Wine And Chocolate by Caducus	1-Apr-04/10:07 AM
you forgot the "E" on brown though...
Re: Finest Hour by creedclay	1-Apr-04/9:00 AM
not bad. a tad longer than it needs to be AND, I like to come to my own conclusions in a poem - without the author telegraphing what I should be perceiving. Like telling me its a "picturesque scene" then proceeding to describe it to me. One or the other, preferrably the other. Same thing with nature at its finest hour, imparting a lesson in life - know what I mean, vern?