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Chemistry (Free verse) by <Wankster>
My eyes grew in sight as I saw you Standing there, unaware of my gaze. I stood there, staring, But causally looking away, As not to be obvious. I could not look away, Seeing you like this for the first time, Past reccurences, A grain in the sand. I thought you would call me, Learn my name, Ask me, Talk to me, Want to get me. You stared ahead, Focus never detered. It was stupid of me to consider, That maybe you'd look, and see a slight inperfection, on a perfect sphere.

Down the ladder: Legend of New Horse

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.6666665
Weighted score: 5.179294
Overall Rank: 4854
Posted: April 1, 2004 5:08 PM PST; Last modified: April 1, 2004 5:08 PM PST
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[6] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 1-Apr-04/6:09 PM | Reply
Four spelling errors.

Is the ending counter-intuitive, or am I missing something?
[9] New Life Drug @ 67.112.121.237 | 1-Apr-04/6:43 PM | Reply
this reminds me of this guy that's always looking at me..its kind of creepy.. but like.. he's kinda cute.. so maybe i should talk to him, i dont want him to feel stupid.
[1] cheese.doodles @ 70.52.168.150 | 25-Apr-07/5:58 PM | Reply
Bleugh. No wonder girls don't like you all that much.
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