replying on Guess the place! by Patsy
18 Aug 2004, 5:54 PM
you define brilliance.
on Guess the place! by Patsy
17 Aug 2004, 10:04 PM
this, i think, goes further than other-of-i-have-seen. the "Maas" makes me want to guess in that direction, but i feel cautious tonight...
on today i just feel like swearing alot. But i won't. by Patsy
9 Aug 2004, 12:09 PM
Much too many questions this raises.
on collars i have worn--exhibit 3 by Patsy
11 May 2004, 8:21 AM
hmm. first things first---dare i say it? i demand the you!
on P.M.S. by Princess_Snowflake
22 Jan 2004, 6:35 AM
Mneh.
on Drying, Cracked Roots by AnotherNothing
21 Jan 2004, 8:36 PM
Hmm. The thoughts are well-held in the beginning and end, but the phraseology might have been a little more flexible in the middle-part.
on The back of a shovel? by horus8
21 Jan 2004, 1:33 PM
hmm. imagery is intense, at any rate. for whatever that's worth. ^_^
on Fall of all by penguin fiend
21 Jan 2004, 1:31 PM
hmm yes. know what you mean. what about constructive interference?
on Last Night by middenHeap
21 Jan 2004, 1:26 PM
aura-ific.
on it's all about the aeroplanes by Patsy
18 Jan 2004, 11:38 PM
Snarkily enough, i was about to not-do anything out of caprice at not having a juicy walking-stick. but being gentle is good too, and so i do so in the end anyways.
You ascend higher in terms of all. i await future years with expectatory heart-leaps.
You ascend higher in terms of all. i await future years with expectatory heart-leaps.
on Benedict Arnold by Justone
18 Jan 2004, 10:48 PM
"crystal smoke", "cardboard beneath", "slit my balloon, bleeding red as i fell"---these scintillate.
"glimpse of past/lessons for future": too much approaching clichee. but, overall, good. salutations.
"glimpse of past/lessons for future": too much approaching clichee. but, overall, good. salutations.
on More same than before by Patsy
4 Jan 2004, 12:26 AM
...they need point-fives when voting.
on (pieces, peaces) by Patsy
4 Jan 2004, 12:24 AM
Again, this is possibly simply the fact of the near-full moon, but...intimations of the Other Side? or, to quote, "dustbunnies where there are none"?
on Borders II by Patsy
2 Nov 2003, 7:49 AM
Well, to leave this out would be too...conspicuous :), and so, I am here. I shall say simply that the internal stirrings this implies are not unknown to my precincts. And now, I shall leave the confessional, and go about my work. they really should have the option of point-fives when voting--I'm always caught between rounding up or rounding down.
on My Instructions or My Tongue In My Cheek? by Patsy
2 Nov 2003, 7:42 AM
My commentating will come, yet! If I am free on Thursday, perhaps. But, until then, I must take pride in this poem, note the correlations to Francis' "Summons", and continue on...
"i am between your Seine and your Rhine"...
ah. if i might dare utter something akin to blasphemy, i'd say that's nearly better than whipped cream. :)
the rest of it, though.. other than "i am just with the rain..." and a few other gems.. when i remember you're capable of "Troublemaker"...i don't know.. it's just.. at the moment, when i'm somewhat sleepy, i'd be more liable to give it a
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ah. if i might dare utter something akin to blasphemy, i'd say that's nearly better than whipped cream. :)
the rest of it, though.. other than "i am just with the rain..." and a few other gems.. when i remember you're capable of "Troublemaker"...i don't know.. it's just.. at the moment, when i'm somewhat sleepy, i'd be more liable to give it a
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on 30,000 feet by Patsy
14 Sep 2003, 3:45 PM
"your lights, my stars"...i'm probably reading more into this than i should, but i find it rather meaningful. this profundity is of another type than the rest of your poem, so if i were to quote it in my style of profundity, i'd not contextualize. :) but, the same holds true for "i am in love with the beauty of your / ignorance" and for that matter, "only your intersections / mark". when fit with the rest of it, the external meaning i've added jars, somewhat.. but taken as a whole, i'd leave you with an 8.
on Troublemaker by Patsy
31 Aug 2003, 7:20 AM
also, though: the title? "troublemaker"?