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My Instructions or My Tongue In My Cheek? (Free verse) by Patsy
Do not visit me in the afternoon. i will associate you with Sunday Jazz and think you pretentious, obvious, blatantly announced. If you visit in the evening, i expect you will have something any one thing to show for yourself bring me a husk, a cirrus, a knoll, then bring on the twilight. Visit me at night, i will be glad, i will give you keys if you give me a constellation (but do make sure it's new, i can't stand them hand-to-hand). Visit me early. Sensing news, i will regard you as the sun and receive you accordingly. Unsure of appropriate tributes to such such a guest, i promise to feed you and fill you up with my dreams.

Up the ladder: All night
Down the ladder: Farewell, Kind Lover

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.428571
Weighted score: 5.6531434
Overall Rank: 2094
Posted: October 7, 2003 10:42 PM PDT; Last modified: October 7, 2003 10:47 PM PDT
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[10] Shardik @ 24.126.113.154 | 7-Oct-03/11:49 PM | Reply
An excellent assemblage of words.
[9] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.175.60 | 8-Oct-03/12:32 AM | Reply
quite good, id say. blessed with 9.
[8] basit_i @ 209.148.205.103 | 2-Nov-03/7:42 AM | Reply
My commentating will come, yet! If I am free on Thursday, perhaps. But, until then, I must take pride in this poem, note the correlations to Francis' "Summons", and continue on...
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