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Benedict Arnold (Free verse) by Justone
The stuff of dreams
you are magical air and crystal smoke,
blowing through the mirrors of illusion
A glimpse of the past
Lessons for the future,
A full-course feast,
including cardboard beneath
You made me choke you down
and handed me a glass of poison to aid the flow
Patted my back and kept your claws sheathed
as I swallowed the wholeness of you, dryness and all
one fell swoop
of coordinated attacks
slit my balloon, bleeding red as I fell
down and down, the seams unraveling in my parachute
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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Weighted score: 5.0
Overall Rank: 7995
Posted: January 18, 2004 12:28 PM PST; Last modified: January 18, 2004 12:28 PM PST
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"glimpse of past/lessons for future": too much approaching clichee. but, overall, good. salutations.