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30,000 feet (Free verse) by Patsy i am unanointed
jetting through limbo
and only your intersections
mark.
Your lights, my stars
cities: nebulae
i am in love with the beauty of your
ignorance, i am wishing you could
see me hanged
not unlike a comdemned toy
a strawflower
protection against the evil eyes
a spector spectator sport.
Up the ladder:
Naughty Word Game
Down the ladder:
Walking Home
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Arithmetic Mean: 5.6
Posted: September 4, 2003 10:48 PM PDT; Last modified: September 4, 2003 10:48 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.0715218 Overall Rank: 6554 Comments:
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EAger to Offend @ 65.95.125.107
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5-Sep-03/1:36 AM
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I dig this, having just got off a plane a few days ago. Like "Recycle", I figure I'm probably missing something but, I'll give it another read soon.
I don't really understand it but part of it I find myself liking. . .what is it all about?
"your lights, my stars"...i'm probably reading more into this than i should, but i find it rather meaningful. this profundity is of another type than the rest of your poem, so if i were to quote it in my style of profundity, i'd not contextualize. :) but, the same holds true for "i am in love with the beauty of your / ignorance" and for that matter, "only your intersections / mark". when fit with the rest of it, the external meaning i've added jars, somewhat.. but taken as a whole, i'd leave you with an 8.
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