regarding some deleted poem...	7-Aug-03/3:57 PM
Nice job. -8-
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Aug-03/6:24 AM
Very well done! -9- Not only does this work flow nicely it conveys a powerful message that contains truth and honesty. There are alot of poems on this site that are well crafted but leave me asking " clever but so what"? This work left me saying "right on"!!
Re: The Grave (thanks to z) by Mr Pig	20-Aug-03/3:56 AM
Mr. Pig, Really nice work. There is some good work on this site but many times I am left untouched by pieces that are well crafted but without real meaning. This work hit home in a powerful way. I really enjoyed reading it. Joe. P.S As usual, I think Z was right on the mark with her comments. She's a serious and classy lady isn't she?
Re: Stargazing Illusionist by DreamerSupreme	20-Aug-03/5:25 AM
Got a bad batch of shrooms huh? Stick with the purple microdot or windowpane...more reliable stuff..know what I mean?
Re: First Love by Mr Pig	20-Aug-03/7:24 AM
Mr Pig, You be da man! Smooth like silk baby! Again, your work is mature, tastey, and meaningful!! Joe.
Re: Trailer Park: Diary of a Hayseed by DreamerSupreme	20-Aug-03/8:30 AM
Ah bong water overdose that's definetely it. "over the trailor park scence of my life"... sure sign of BW overose..seen it a million times. Take two asprin and suck down a bottle of Lea and Perins Worchestiere sauce (got that in your Egyptian Market? it's right next to the embombing fluid)and you'll feel much better in the morning. -3- Happy 18th birthday! Joe.
Re: How A Panhandler Kills by SupremeDreamer	21-Aug-03/4:02 AM
Yo Dreamster, This is really nice work. I'm not sure I'd classify it as poetry but it had all the elements of a well thought out, mature, and meaningful story. I think the perspective offered in this piece is on the money and PROFOUND. Good work. -9-
Re: A Surgeons Butchery by SupremeDreamer	22-Aug-03/8:21 AM
Dreamster, This work captures the essence of a cold and calculating killer. Your use of surgeon as killer brings this point home quite well and I did get a feel for the terror of it all. However, I have seen you bring words together in a more fluid and tastey fashion. Not your best but still good. P.S. I gave serious thought to your last message to me regarding the need to open up and just let it out. You were right. On the way to work this morning while in the midst of a traffic jam (i'm in New York City) I came up with something that I posted earlier this morning. Take a look see and let me know what you think. Joe.
regarding some deleted poem...	24-Aug-03/10:51 AM
DS, You do have quite an imagination. I don't know if this is a Lyric but if it is I could image Jim Morrison singing it. The first two lines of the piece are a bit unclear but successive lines got me on track with the story. Flowed real well till I got to "yet its own.........watercourses" not quite sure what you were trying to get across. Next two verses are excellent, very vivid imagery. Now I must say, I found it difficult in the end to piece the story together and reconcile the chorus with the body of the work. Who does the surfer child represent and what was his ultimate fate....death as the chorus implies or life as implied by the last verse? Perhaps it is my linear thinking, not the layout of your story, that betrays me here....which could explain why I have found it difficult to take my own work to a more abstract and creative level. I might not get it all, but, like I told you all along, you are one creative son of a bitch. I liked it.
Re: The Last Day Of Christ by Mr Pig	3-Sep-03/4:00 PM
Mr. Pig, I really like your work and have much respect for your opinions. This piece is sharp and descriptive but did leave me with some questions (perhaps I look for more than you intend to reveal). In your eyes is the carpenter on the cross a mere mortal or God incarnate? Is Judas' suicide self-driven or the product God's wrath? P.S. I want to thank you for your kind words, encouragement and well deserved kick in the ass. You were absolutely on the mark in advising me not to abandon this site. Thanks....Joe
Re: The Waiting Room by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	3-Sep-03/4:20 PM
Angel, Fair enough, but while you're on your soap box painting with your broad brush, why don't you compose something about lovely Muslims who fly jets into skyscrapers, strap bombs to themselves to kill and maim the innocent, and preach that those who do not accept Alah as the one and only God are infidels worthy of death. I mean at least us Christians are willing to allow God to do his work in the after-life...these nuts want to blow up the world so they can lay thier dirty hands on some untapped pussy! I'll tell ya, between you me and the wall.. I don't think there are 72 virgins in all of the western hemisphere! So get to it with those little hands and bang out a draft... I eagerly await your crafty work. -5-
Re: What's World Peace? by DeadtotheWorld	6-Sep-03/5:02 AM
You suffer from severe paranoia my friend! If the CIA, FBI. SS....was as you describe your ass would be in shackles and you'd be boyfiend (i'll refrain from graphic depictions)to some hard core lifer at a federal prison. Please don't be offended but you write in broken english. Are you a recent immigrant, an 11 year old, or just a fucking illiterate?
Re: Why by J.B. Manning	6-Sep-03/5:25 AM
Becuase you're a fucking fudge packer...that's why!
regarding some deleted poem...	8-Sep-03/11:02 AM
"...skill can possibly represent". Great english! You fudge packers are really a panic.. No matter how remote a subject might be from ones sexuality..you always find a way of brining it back to ones Johnson. It's really an amusing phenomenon.
Re: Fury by J.B. Manning	8-Sep-03/12:50 PM
Hey JB, A little choppy and disjointed but it does have some nice lines. -6- Joe-joe
Re: Help The Aged by Mr Pig	8-Sep-03/1:55 PM
Mr. Pig, It's funny, I'll be 45 soon and all of a sudden I've begun thinking about growing old. I know I've got some time but 20 seems like it was here just yesterday. Getting old in and of itself sucks...what more do the aged endure when they are rejected and tossed aside by an ungrateful community. Its a reflection of our times and the throw away society we live in. God save us from ourselves! -7- Joe-joe
regarding some deleted poem...	9-Sep-03/3:26 PM
Crystal, Bravo, Bravo..this was really nice. Captures the dilema and emotion (frustration)of the subject very well. Nice, descriptive language. I would reconsider "canvas aids not at all". It's a bit awkward. Also I think you mean inner conflict not inter conflict (Type -o I'm sure). By far your best job. Way to go kiddo!!!
Re: Ode to My Crack by J.B. Manning	11-Sep-03/7:24 AM
JB, Your work is interesting. You obviously have a lot of passion and feeling. This comes across powerfully in your work. There are lines as well as ideas here that are fabulous...they fit into the context of the poems theme and flow nicely. Unfortunately there are other lines that seem to be remotely related to your theme and forced in terms of rhythm and rhyme. This cheapens your work..which has the potential to be quite good. Also I notice that most of your work has a short cadence about it. Its sometimes choppy. I'd also consider shortening this piece. But as I said, there are parts that I really liked. Joe-Joe
Re: Armageddon (I Am Mr. America) by SupremeDreamer	12-Sep-03/4:18 PM
Dreamer, I liked this! Is this guy a private in the army who comes from West Virginia? Best fucking killers are always rebels. They've got the most balls and instinctively know when to strike their prey. Thier a bitch to control and manage, but they get the fucking job done! "You see shooting squirrels......" is a great fucking verse! Nice Job -9-
Re: Nicholas Martin by horus8	12-Sep-03/9:34 PM
Jeremi, Please accept my deepest sympathy. A life ended so soon is tragic. I have three children around Nicholas's age. Life is so complicated today and kids are torn in so many directions with so many expectations imposed on them. I have a daughter of 21 who struggles with depression...it can be very tough...my heart bleeds for Nicholas' parents. I'm sure your friendship was a source of comfort to him....but life can be so fucking cruel...Be well my friend, Joe-joe