Re: Three Daughters by <~>	11-Sep-02/1:09 PM
dude! that's really fucking beautiful. I'm not one to read through a long poem, generally, but damn. :) thank you. Sure, it's a bit overdone, and there are a few awkward scanning bits, but it's really fucking well done. (I recommend you try to publish it somewhere... nfg.ca would probably take it...)
Re: A missing puzzle piece. by trev086	11-Sep-02/8:58 PM
this is painful, but not for the reason you want it to be.
Re: Proud to be black by girl	11-Sep-02/9:01 PM
beningly -> benignly didain -> disdain plea is not a verb. plead, perhaps? or "give plea" (stretching it)? smmoth -> smooth I'm glad you're proud, but it would do the sentiment a lot if you could put the poem into less of a halting collection of vaguely rhyming fragments.
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Sep-02/9:01 PM
I want this poem to end!
Re: Swirls of light... by DevilTmptrss	11-Sep-02/9:02 PM
erm. some work on punctuation and flow would help this; it seems to fall into a rut with the rhythm, and then falter even from that.
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Sep-02/9:07 PM
umm. hmm. keep trying? :) and do try to take the time. that should be the easiest part, to spend more time on it.
Re: dps by decadentlaurel	16-Sep-02/12:23 AM
This is cute; I like the toss of "Oh captain, my captain" into the mix. The poem as a whole has a good flow/feel to it.
regarding some deleted poem...	16-Sep-02/1:34 AM
the first bit describing the morning is niftily done, but doesn't really say anything. The second bit tries to say something but the two bits don't mix well for me.
Re: On waiting to pick up my daughter on Tuesday by poetandknowit	16-Sep-02/1:39 AM
I don't understand the "shape" of this poem. A slide? A method of distancing? Ignoring the shape, I like the simplicity of statement. The rhythm is really strange, but it works.
Re: dps by decadentlaurel	16-Sep-02/11:23 PM
I don't understand how "i to look away again" fits in. I don't know what exactly you've changed, but my only stumbling block at the moment is "i to look away again"
Re: dps 2 - new ver. by decadentlaurel	16-Sep-02/11:24 PM
I've grown fond of version one; this one doesn't appeal to me so much.
Re: first words by decadentlaurel	16-Sep-02/11:25 PM
a sad/sweet sentiment. I couldn't get into the reading of it, however.
Re: Gone Away by Christof	18-Sep-02/3:55 AM
very nice. :) It warms my heart that you've found poemranker to be helpful. :) I really should make the "editing" system a little more of a system, though. versioning or something. bleah.
regarding some deleted poem...	18-Sep-02/3:56 AM
I don't get it.
Re: quickie by <~>	19-Sep-02/11:38 PM
rarr! =)
Re: BoatFuckerPoetandKnowit by bigbigdog	20-Sep-02/12:51 PM
I'm going to have to say that just changing "into the ocean" to "sucking cock" is not enough.
Re: On waiting to pick up my lover on Friday by bigbigdog	20-Sep-02/12:53 PM
This actually has (in my mind) significantly different meaning that the original. I don't approve given the context of what you've already copied and how you've copied it, but I think this is valid. [yeah, like you fucking care, right?]
Re: Ambiguous Love Poem For A Girl I Once Knew by poetandknowit	22-Sep-02/1:29 AM
yeehaw =)
Re: First, you gotta bend over.. by Bachus	22-Sep-02/12:06 PM
actually, nothing was showing up in "recent" unless you edited the piece -- a side effect of my "plagiarism" patch. That has since been fixed.
Re: Spanish fLie by flatliner	23-Sep-02/5:10 PM
babelfish says: If you say to me that you love I to me that it is not the truth. When you say to me that you hate I to me that you have found your heart. If you cry when you sing I to me that it is not the truth. If (ay olvideras) time me but no longer (ay) long time. We looked for the way to live by the day and if we were, it is in error. Everything that step, us (olvidera), and, I that it is not the truth. I have no spanish. :)