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Proud to be black (Other) by girl Swinging my hips as i walk
Gesticulating beningly as i talk
Why should i regard their didain?
or drop to my knees and plea for acceptance.
The breeze provoked my afro puffs as i relax on the seashore
My smmoth dark skin gleamed and my eyes sparkle as the sun tends to
smile more.
They screwed up their faces as if they smell a dead rat.
However my superb shimmering smile remained.
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Posted: July 11, 2002 3:21 PM PDT; Last modified: July 11, 2002 3:21 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.2777777 Overall Rank: 13154 Comments:
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evergreen @ 165.247.107.129
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11-Jul-02/4:07 PM
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really liked this - but the second line 'gesticulating benignly as i talk' somehow does not fit in well. loved the last 2 lines!
It's people like you that give anti-racism a bad name. Can't you distinguish between not being ashamed to be <x> and being proud to be <x>? I'm not ashamed to be a human. But neither am I proud of it. I didn't do anything to achieve it. It doesn't make me better, in a moral sense than anything else. There is no conceivable reason why I should be proud of it. You are clearly not ashamed of being black, which I'm sure is fine and dandy. But why are you proud of it? Did you earn it? Does it make you a better person? I'm tempted to think this is a joke, since it is such an amazingly hackneyed and pointless expression of the 'self-esteem' that gets shoved down people's throats every time they leave their house or turn on their TV.
I get the odd feeling that this was actually written by a thirteen year old Irish Catholic virgin with braces living somewhere in Bermuda
this is a great poem though I feel like it's half done, you should add more.
beningly -> benignly
didain -> disdain plea is not a verb. plead, perhaps? or "give plea" (stretching it)? smmoth -> smooth I'm glad you're proud, but it would do the sentiment a lot if you could put the poem into less of a halting collection of vaguely rhyming fragments. 101 view(s)
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