on vacation by geewhiz1962
7 Jul 2003, 8:16 PM
the rewrite is alot better than the original. heres an 8. btw, you really need to have a better attitude concerning commentry, because changing titles to erase a low vote is a pathetic response. Plus, giving me a low rating when i respond to it by sticking a zero on your work is childish... doesnt make you look intelligent. dont take this comment to be pompous in nature, but i do admit sadly that it does seem that way. Im just trying to give you some advice not to step on you, but to help you.
on 910 Via Padova, Claremont, Ca. (Mike Piazza Edit) by Jeremi B. Handrinos
7 Jul 2003, 8:09 PM
hrmmm. cool adaptation yoda. ;P 9.
on Things by MrsGretchen
7 Jul 2003, 8:07 PM
Not bad, good work. It could use a better introduction though.. and a better title. heres a 7
on the power that be by crwncka1
7 Jul 2003, 8:05 PM
dood.. you need to realize that you dont have a fucking inkling of understanding concerning the subject.. plus your limping poetically with how your attempting to poetically write about it.
on the godself within by crwncka1
7 Jul 2003, 7:58 PM
the title and the poem have nothing to do with each other. you failed miserably to make a poem about the godself within. blessed with 3
on oh god please help me by crwncka1
7 Jul 2003, 7:55 PM
"It is only my refection" reflection
"but their simply appears to be," their should be There
Nice poem, though its a little confusing, you need to be more descriptive. You have alot to work on, but you have potential. Blessed with 6
"but their simply appears to be," their should be There
Nice poem, though its a little confusing, you need to be more descriptive. You have alot to work on, but you have potential. Blessed with 6
on Crowning Achievement by MrsGretchen
7 Jul 2003, 7:49 PM
I really like this poem alot. It is written well, but theres lots of room for improvement. blessed with 8.
on My Ass Bag by King Abdullah I
7 Jul 2003, 7:23 PM
OK let me inform everyone: I DID NOT WRITE THIS CRAP.
TWO: Im going to ask that this username be DELETED.
Im not going to have some imposter attempting to make me look like an idiot.
Also, settle, i think your the one responsible for this, and its not smart to piss me off. If im wrong about my assumptions, forgive me.
btw, heres a zero.
TWO: Im going to ask that this username be DELETED.
Im not going to have some imposter attempting to make me look like an idiot.
Also, settle, i think your the one responsible for this, and its not smart to piss me off. If im wrong about my assumptions, forgive me.
btw, heres a zero.
on Priceless Moment by thepinkbunnyofdoom
7 Jul 2003, 7:13 PM
Haiku.. ah, i never really had much practice, actually no practice is more like it, with haikus.. but yeah, abandon the haiku idea or remake this.. could be a damn good start for a better poem though. i wont vote on this for the moment.
on To be titled by Horus8(Craft's Service) by thepinkbunnyofdoom
7 Jul 2003, 7:09 PM
Hrmm.. i remninds me of the table of contents of a magazine.. hrmm.. can i be allowed to ponder a title for this one too? good work btw. blessed with 10
replying on 12673 Jalepeno ave. Chino, Ca. by Jeremi B. Handrinos
7 Jul 2003, 4:31 PM
Dont see why, but your welcome. ;)
replying on The Zen of the Pen by DreamerSupreme
7 Jul 2003, 4:27 PM
yeah, i know, i have a problem with being cheap when it comes to rhymes. ;P
replying on Ocular Photoalbum by DreamerSupreme
7 Jul 2003, 4:24 PM
Yeah, so you now see i can play the emotion guitar. ;P
replying on Ocular Photoalbum by DreamerSupreme
7 Jul 2003, 4:23 PM
Heh. dont poke on those particular emotions of mine. ;P
on lucid building peace by nolan
6 Jul 2003, 9:03 AM
Over all i enjoyed the poem, but i think the piece before ...death is confusing to a point.. or thats my opinion anyway. heres a 7.
on Rude Awakenings by OneFingerAnswer
6 Jul 2003, 8:39 AM
Damn good. Very descriptive and well worded. blessed with 10.
on Hi, my name is "Look at me, Stop it!" I'm Bi-polar by horus8
6 Jul 2003, 8:33 AM
Yep, I love this poem.. muse did some strange whine on my poetic soup comments section about not wanting to vote because of his/hers work being mutilated.. and when i saw this, i laughed my ass off in joy.. blessed with a 10, good fucking job!!!
on 195.157.153.253 by <~>
6 Jul 2003, 8:14 AM
lol.. yeah. still have wierd thoughts that i am settle? i hope not after looking at the ips, because then id start to feel like alice in wonderland, where i dont know who i am or where i am. nice poem, heres a 10.
replying on Poetic Soup [revised] by SupremeDreamer
6 Jul 2003, 6:14 AM
Good suggestions, but im going to keep those parts as i originaly wrote them. Thanks for your thoughts though, they are always appreciated.