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Priceless Moment (Haiku) by thepinkbunnyofdoom Counter culture on a bartop
Three Private Eyes and Two Undercover Cops
Busted, 5 years, Trafficing Stopped
Up the ladder:
Small Teeth in a Glass Bowl
Down the ladder:
After seven days in the sun
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 7.785714
Posted: July 6, 2003 9:47 PM PDT; Last modified: July 6, 2003 9:47 PM PDTWeighted score: 7.0365205 Overall Rank: 39 Comments:
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Jeremi B. Handrinos @ 24.126.113.154
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6-Jul-03/10:17 PM
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When you fuck up a haiku, they roll out the red carpet. Great Christ in Saucer, abandon ship, he's never seeen an abacus.
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thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.21.223
> Jeremi B. Handrinos
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6-Jul-03/10:31 PM
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I'd have paid just about anything to have seen the look on your face at the very moment you read this but your comment gives me a nice hint. LOL it is over by a few syllables but still, 5 words -7 words -5.
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Jeremi B. Handrinos @ 24.126.113.154
> thepinkbunnyofdoom
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7-Jul-03/2:02 AM
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17 syllables, words don't matter.
JASON I THINK I LOVE YOU
Awe... Your such a sweetie pie.
a comment nice and succinct is the essence of poetry for me. This is not a haiku but never mind
even though it's not a haiku
interesting fuck the po po i just wanna smoke my ganja in peace.
Yeah, but hey! Its legal in canada(at least thats what I heard anyway.) If only the Bush would do something useful and make it legal... Til then its Tokin in the basement, for me.
Haiku.. ah, i never really had much practice, actually no practice is more like it, with haikus.. but yeah, abandon the haiku idea or remake this.. could be a damn good start for a better poem though. i wont vote on this for the moment.
It was more for Horus8's(or any other serious poet's) reaction of WTF. I know its not a Haiku, But I'm not ready to add to it yet, but Don't worry I will(Eventually).
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