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Crowning Achievement (Free verse) by MrsGretchen The crowning achievement
to a lifes work
was the downfall and murders
of those who broke first
He screams at the walls
Please set me free.
I performed a service
for purity
It is not yours to judge me
I answer to my god
and for him I toiled years
caught evil, gained scars
I ache at the memories
and the horrors like you
Yes I would still perform them
I would give my due
Please set me loose
there is more to be done
Do you realize you'll be killing too
When midnight is done
If I could I would make you
all understand that some people
deserve to die, I am who I am
a man
My crowning achievements
Have you deceived
I am more than a killer
I set people free
Up the ladder:
Im Sorry
Down the ladder:
Robotic Plague
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Posted: July 7, 2003 9:33 AM PDT; Last modified: July 7, 2003 9:33 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.9403987 Overall Rank: 9050 The following users have marked this poem on their favorites list:
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Better.
I really like this poem alot. It is written well, but theres lots of room for improvement. blessed with 8.
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quite vague really and not anchored to anything
the first verse sets the intention well and I like the half-rhyme years and scars though