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Poetic Soup [revised] (Free verse) by SupremeDreamer [staring at this, i decided to keep the orgasmic pleasure i feel when
writing, and threw away the food..im getting fat.]
The failed writer is soon
Becoming devoid of poetic
Imperfection due to
The sudden realization
That he, the poet,
Lacks discipline
Handicapping his skill so that he
Can not begin the voyage
Into deep waters
Of emotion and thought
But what the realization brought
Was inspiration, a new orgasmic
Sensation that drove
The dreamer into the kitchen
To ponder the stove
And how to cook using
Words.
Up the ladder:
The story of the myopic fishwife OR She: A muse t' me
Down the ladder:
The Love Poem
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 7.4
Posted: June 30, 2003 11:33 AM PDT; Last modified: July 27, 2003 8:15 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.286087 Overall Rank: 3725 Comments:
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PoeTech @ 67.75.24.131
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30-Jun-03/3:25 PM
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Young asian male whore: 200 dollars. Big poster of Dylan Thomas and some pink flannel drapes: 80 dollars. Subscription to Black Inches: 50 dollars. Poetic orgasm: priceless.
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SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.177.11
> PoeTech
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1-Jul-03/5:52 PM
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Ah.. ok. nice Wanker scar...
This is the GAYEST poem on the whole website
It's homosexuality is startling
Your comment is absolutely priceless, so is your profile. Your great insightfull comment doesn't have enough balls or intelligence (i assume) to perhaps suggest ways on how it could be improved. Nor do you have the balls (i assume) to back up your statement by pointing out the problems with the poem.
I don't know who has a more homosexual personality, the poem, DA, or you.. I think your the most blantant homosexual in this trio... Also, your obvious ignorance is startling, so is your arrogance, which is startling due to apparent retardation. Do yourself a favor: grab your knees in a gay club.
Gay men never grab their knees, they grab yours and a drink.
the computer feel is a bit corner.
other than that it sets itself an ambition and answers it, well reasoned. cooking for food is an interesting link, Plath used to do lots of baking before writing.
a bit corner? i dont exactly understand what you mean, could you explain that statement?
i meant a bit corny, a bit out of place
Oh. well.. hrmm. Oki doki, out it goes. ;)
Insightful and communicative
Not bad. But I won't rank you because of my stigma poem mutilated!
Huh? *mutilated*? how have I mutilated your work? I don't remember voting for it, but its possible I did, and whatever rank I gave it was my opinion, I don't rank poems badly just because I wish to -mutilate- them. Plus I am pretty slack when it comes to voting. I'm no where near as tough a voter as most others in ranker ville here, so unless your poem struck me as badly written, or written in a way i find tasteless or without any brilliance, etc, it probly didn't get a harsh rating from me.
Looking at your stigma poem, its is not something that would cause me to rip it to pieces via vote.. but whatever, its your choice on whether or not you should vote, but if its because your poem didnt get a good rating, then thats fucking idiotic..
I would change "orgasmic" to organic, and lose "for food" Ending it at words.
Good suggestions, but im going to keep those parts as i originaly wrote them. Thanks for your thoughts though, they are always appreciated.
Tasty.
Liked this! (oh- spell cannot as one word...)
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