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Poetic Soup [revised] (Free verse) by SupremeDreamer
[staring at this, i decided to keep the orgasmic pleasure i feel when writing, and threw away the food..im getting fat.] The failed writer is soon Becoming devoid of poetic Imperfection due to The sudden realization That he, the poet, Lacks discipline Handicapping his skill so that he Can not begin the voyage Into deep waters Of emotion and thought But what the realization brought Was inspiration, a new orgasmic Sensation that drove The dreamer into the kitchen To ponder the stove And how to cook using Words.

Up the ladder: ~What do I do~
Down the ladder: Portsmouth belle 1

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.25
Weighted score: 5.2682066
Overall Rank: 3853
Posted: June 30, 2003 11:33 AM PDT; Last modified: July 27, 2003 8:15 PM PDT
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[0] PoeTech @ 67.75.24.131 | 30-Jun-03/3:25 PM | Reply
Young asian male whore: 200 dollars. Big poster of Dylan Thomas and some pink flannel drapes: 80 dollars. Subscription to Black Inches: 50 dollars. Poetic orgasm: priceless.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.177.11 > PoeTech | 1-Jul-03/5:52 PM | Reply
Ah.. ok. nice Wanker scar...
[1] wFraser Allonby Q.C.w @ 195.157.153.253 | 1-Jul-03/6:56 AM | Reply
This is the GAYEST poem on the whole website

It's homosexuality is startling
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.177.11 > wFraser Allonby Q.C.w | 1-Jul-03/5:51 PM | Reply
Your comment is absolutely priceless, so is your profile. Your great insightfull comment doesn't have enough balls or intelligence (i assume) to perhaps suggest ways on how it could be improved. Nor do you have the balls (i assume) to back up your statement by pointing out the problems with the poem.

I don't know who has a more homosexual personality, the poem, DA, or you.. I think your the most blantant homosexual in this trio...

Also, your obvious ignorance is startling, so is your arrogance, which is startling due to apparent retardation.

Do yourself a favor: grab your knees in a gay club.
[9] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 > SupremeDreamer | 28-Jul-03/12:34 PM | Reply
Gay men never grab their knees, they grab yours and a drink.
[8] richa @ 195.92.168.173 | 1-Jul-03/11:03 AM | Reply
the computer feel is a bit corner.

other than that it sets itself an ambition and answers it, well reasoned.

cooking for food is an interesting link, Plath used to do lots of baking before writing.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.177.11 > richa | 1-Jul-03/5:42 PM | Reply
a bit corner? i dont exactly understand what you mean, could you explain that statement?
[8] richa @ 195.92.67.67 > SupremeDreamer | 2-Jul-03/8:03 AM | Reply
i meant a bit corny, a bit out of place
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.166.154 > richa | 5-Jul-03/1:15 AM | Reply
Oh. well.. hrmm. Oki doki, out it goes. ;)
[8] richa @ 81.86.244.35 | 5-Jul-03/3:34 AM | Reply
Insightful and communicative
[n/a] deleted user @ 12.219.155.182 | 5-Jul-03/11:43 AM | Reply
Not bad. But I won't rank you because of my stigma poem mutilated!
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.168.178 > deleted user | 6-Jul-03/6:12 AM | Reply
Huh? *mutilated*? how have I mutilated your work? I don't remember voting for it, but its possible I did, and whatever rank I gave it was my opinion, I don't rank poems badly just because I wish to -mutilate- them. Plus I am pretty slack when it comes to voting. I'm no where near as tough a voter as most others in ranker ville here, so unless your poem struck me as badly written, or written in a way i find tasteless or without any brilliance, etc, it probly didn't get a harsh rating from me.

Looking at your stigma poem, its is not something that would cause me to rip it to pieces via vote.. but whatever, its your choice on whether or not you should vote, but if its because your poem didnt get a good rating, then thats fucking idiotic..
[9] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 5-Jul-03/1:36 PM | Reply
I would change "orgasmic" to organic, and lose "for food" Ending it at words.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.168.178 > horus8 | 6-Jul-03/6:14 AM | Reply
Good suggestions, but im going to keep those parts as i originaly wrote them. Thanks for your thoughts though, they are always appreciated.
[9] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 28-Jul-03/12:33 PM | Reply
Tasty.
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