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Poetic Soup [revised] (Free verse) by SupremeDreamer

[staring at this, i decided to keep the orgasmic pleasure i feel when writing, and threw away the food..im getting fat.] The failed writer is soon Becoming devoid of poetic Imperfection due to The sudden realization That he, the poet, Lacks discipline Handicapping his skill so that he Can not begin the voyage Into deep waters Of emotion and thought But what the realization brought Was inspiration, a new orgasmic Sensation that drove The dreamer into the kitchen To ponder the stove And how to cook using Words.

horus8 5-Jul-03/1:36 PM
I would change "orgasmic" to organic, and lose "for food" Ending it at words.




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