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lucid building peace (Free verse) by nolan
and who knows covered by a green tint i'm silent i'm still breathing the fumes affraid of the sky with the relivance in its eyes slimy liquidy rubber in which makes me treck i didn't eat enough enough to make me fall out of health and out of mind i am going but when am i not no one ever stays it doesn't make sense i am always going just to start going again until I arrive home ........DEaTH from where i come the dead are unborn just as the unborn are dead tragedy of life and the rejoice of peace until it starts again just let me hide behind you or in your car outside your mind on the moon under the sun (insert picture here)

Up the ladder: Never forget
Down the ladder: Dirge

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.5
Weighted score: 5.134471
Overall Rank: 5561
Posted: June 12, 2003 8:53 PM PDT; Last modified: July 6, 2003 1:10 AM PDT
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Comments:
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 12-Jun-03/9:21 PM | Reply
loquidy? Bravo, may I put a picture of Mao in?
[8] richa @ 81.86.252.121 | 6-Jul-03/4:40 AM | Reply
'the dead are unborn' well summed up

lots of things to make you think here
[7] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.168.178 | 6-Jul-03/9:03 AM | Reply
Over all i enjoyed the poem, but i think the piece before ...death is confusing to a point.. or thats my opinion anyway. heres a 7.
[8] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 6-Jul-03/11:00 AM | Reply
Smart poem.
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