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blackhole (Free verse) by crwncka1
The evilness I feel, though the dark sunlight sky, comes from a place, where nothing is real. This place I speak of, is where I reside, for it is the black hole that looms, so deep within us. Its a place where none like to go, but I exist there. Though I simply can't explain, this trapped feeling I have, as words simply won't describe, what i am trying to see, though this black void tunnel, what i am in search of, is to feel the release, that would fill me up, make me whole, in solving this mystery, that is all of who i am.

Up the ladder: One road
Down the ladder: Starting Over

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.75
Weighted score: 4.8509965
Overall Rank: 10532
Posted: July 7, 2003 9:42 AM PDT; Last modified: July 7, 2003 9:42 AM PDT
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[n/a] richa @ 81.86.236.252 | 7-Jul-03/11:01 AM | Reply
I know you can't explain the trapped feeling. But please try

this poem doesn't seem to speak. It is just a few sentences strung together
[n/a] crwncka1 @ 67.30.49.163 > richa | 7-Jul-03/11:06 AM | Reply
see poem 'oh god please help me' if you really wanna know heh
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 > crwncka1 | 7-Jul-03/2:25 PM | Reply
Oh, yeah, that should guide her home. lol.
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 7-Jul-03/2:26 PM | Reply
Sounds likes a case of food poisoning to me. Every poem you wrote today was an utter waste of time. Try again.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.168.51 | 7-Jul-03/8:01 PM | Reply
Yeah.. i dont intent to be mean or insulting.. but bachus is right... your recent pieces are.. crappy. The ideas are good, just the way you presented them suck.
[n/a] deleted user @ 24.222.81.233 | 15-Sep-03/4:48 PM | Reply
Yes, we all have a black hole.
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