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Starting Over (Free verse) by justjay
Circular motion- spinning endlessly- end over end- leaving to start starting to leave- endless lines passed down through time- twirling endlessly, through a hole- the abyss- controlled only by the motion- spinning spinning til everything just stops- reset to normal- to just start all over again.

Up the ladder: blackhole
Down the ladder: Missing

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.75
Weighted score: 4.8509965
Overall Rank: 10533
Posted: August 10, 2003 1:12 PM PDT; Last modified: August 18, 2003 8:28 PM PDT
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Comments:
[6] richa @ 81.86.251.209 | 19-Aug-03/7:46 AM | Reply
OK flows kind of well. Well communicated.
Lacking in any real originality though
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 19-Aug-03/8:11 PM | Reply
I would suggest a different more assertive user name such as Cyclopsis, or The Maskallero, or for braver sorts THE ADVENTUREs' OF ROCK HARD CORN BREAD or Sir Sherbert.
[n/a] justjay @ 192.107.108.232 > Bachus | 3-Nov-03/12:05 PM | Reply
I specifically chose the name justjay cuz it's just the way i am. i don't need some "more assertive" way of saying who i am. I can say my whole personality and whole life in just the words just jay. that's all i am. . .
[5] fevriere @ 213.232.79.42 | 7-May-04/1:36 AM | Reply
Sadly, I kinda like it. But have you ever seen an abyss?
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