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Missing (Free verse) by justjay Something's gone.
Hurt, pain. . . space.
Emptiness in a spot of happiness.
I can't feel her anymore.
Something's wrong.
I'm desperately reaching out.
Nobodies there.
Falling into space.
Overly protective of nothing.
It's gone. . .
Up the ladder:
Starting Over
Down the ladder:
one day, one moment
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Posted: August 10, 2003 1:14 PM PDT; Last modified: August 10, 2003 1:14 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.8509965 Overall Rank: 10534 Comments:
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For example emptiness could be a bell not tolling, or a kiss before work after 20 years of marriage, give us what emptiness is to you. Also when you reach out what is there? is it emptiness? tell us about how the air feels so lost around your fingers anything other than nothing.
Lots of potential here but lethargic 5