| Re: a comment on A Surgeons Butchery by SupremeDreamer |
23-Aug-03/1:28 AM |
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good, open up more! be brave, be silly, be fucking idiotic at times.. stumble around the field like a mad man.. youll learn alot about the grass that way.
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| Re: a comment on A Surgeons Butchery by SupremeDreamer |
23-Aug-03/1:26 AM |
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im not obsessed with murder at the moment.. maybe one day i will, but not this month.
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| Re: a comment on A Surgeons Butchery by SupremeDreamer |
23-Aug-03/1:25 AM |
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-frown- i hate it when you just jump out of nowhere and deliver a kick my nuts.. ouch.
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| Re: a comment on A Surgeons Butchery by SupremeDreamer |
23-Aug-03/1:23 AM |
uh.. cmon now REMEMBER THE DICTIONARY MAGIC???? EHHH??
lesion:
Any break in the skin or an organ caused by violence or surgical incision
uh oh? rilke, cmon now.. do your research before yappin!!!
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| Re: a comment on A Surgeons Butchery by SupremeDreamer |
23-Aug-03/1:21 AM |
*sigh*.. yeah the story shit didnt cut it, im experimenting with this way of writing and i realize: its time to move on.
hey, girlie, you going to tap dance anytime soon?
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| Re: a comment on To Mom by Brittanyy |
23-Aug-03/12:02 AM |
try it? i lived it, and maybe you should read horus's Gordian Knot.. trust me girlie, just because shit happens in life doesnt mean you should whimper and cry about it.. check out Maman: Psychic Tophet.. i didnt cry about it, i fixed it.
Do the topic justice damn it.. atleast try to improve your ability to write if your going to write in self pity.
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| Re: A Poet's Rifle by SupremeDreamer |
22-Aug-03/11:56 PM |
This is a remake of Deranged Sailor: Sea Sickness..
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| Re: The Angel at the arcade (this is actually an 'acne') by scitz |
22-Aug-03/11:07 PM |
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thats one damn good pimple.. crappier than ever.. indeed, its acne.. 10!
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| Re: Camera Obscura by Fear of Garbage |
21-Aug-03/7:42 PM |
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hrmm.. an obsession with black oceans man?.. repetitive use of a word gets boring, fast. other than that, i liked it. blessed with 8
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| Re: fragile by Bill Z Bub |
21-Aug-03/7:39 PM |
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| Re: a comment on A Surgeons Butchery by SupremeDreamer |
21-Aug-03/7:24 PM |
theres lots of examples concerning poetry where they read like a story.. so good or bad really depends on how the poem affects you. -shrug-
Jumpy? exactly what are you trying to say? explain.
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| Re: A Manifesto on Murder by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
21-Aug-03/6:45 PM |
hrmm. your right, theres lots of profit in murder. ok bastage, ill write a murder poem..
heres a nine
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| Re: When He's In Me by J.B. Manning |
21-Aug-03/3:35 PM |
Lightly slightly - pick one and move on.. please dont repeat the same thing twice for a sing line.. its redundant..
Not a bad erotic write.. but i think you could revise this to a much better output.. up to you anyway.
blessed with 8.
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| Re: Caffeinated Contemplations by J.B. Manning |
21-Aug-03/3:32 PM |
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| Re: a comment on Women have Babies and Men Murder. by horus8 |
21-Aug-03/3:09 PM |
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Im more inclined to let the bitch live and introduce her to my friend that has herpes. ;)
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| Re: Women have Babies and Men Murder. by horus8 |
21-Aug-03/3:01 PM |
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ice scream.. nice, i love that. 10.
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| Re: a comment on Upon a falling star (new/changed) by LuckyJoe |
21-Aug-03/2:57 PM |
look, im no musician.. but my english teacher from the first grade could inform you of this fact:
every piece of writing needs a damned beginning/middle/end...
uncooked due to it being a song? luckyjoe, dont blab stupid crap like that.. look under horus8 and check out some of his lyrics, you'll find that they are quite well cooked, and they have a beginning!
Look around for other lyrics, explore this world.. youll find that any lyric worth a fuck isnt going to be without a beginning.. this is basic english class lessons man..
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| Re: a comment on How A Panhandler Kills by SupremeDreamer |
21-Aug-03/2:23 PM |
1: point taken.
2: Thats not true.. the smart ones move on... if they get involved with a cheating whore in the first place, then that should be a clue concerning intelligence..
If i write a gory murder poem or something around that nature, will you stop bugging me about murder?? eh?? what the fuck made murder a #1 priority in your head at the moment? I'm really wondering why you have this current fascination..
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| Re: To Mom by Brittanyy |
21-Aug-03/2:17 PM |
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... commiting suicide because your mother drinks? CMON, get the fuck over it, get up, and LIVE... bleh.. heres a 7.
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| Re: walk out by NNirvana13666 |
21-Aug-03/2:11 PM |
Worship the air I breathe
just to inform you, your suffocating.. and your breath stinks, i dont worship such bad smelling oxygen.
heres a 6
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