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Free verse № 61756

fragile

Member since 2002 · Posted 21 Aug 2003 · Edited 22 Aug 2003 · 9 comments

Your white envelopes, arriving bimonthly, dinged and wrinkled from the journey, I lift by the corner with finger and thumb carry it queitly to the nearest table, lay it down softly and with one hand smooth it out so that it is flat and crisp and ready. sometimes I use one finger, and a fingernail, but this time I take up the letter opener, like an antique dagger and enter through the tiny hole where the flap meets the corner and slice. cutting slowly, with full attention, but firmly until the top of the envelope opens and with a slight shake or shiver, you slide on out. And now I take you up in both hands, unfold your sentences and tumble into your sheets

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9 comments

[8] SupremeDreamer 21-Aug-03/7:39 PM Reply
hrmm. Interesting. 8
[n/a] Bill Z Bub 21-Aug-03/7:53 PM Reply
hh. cheesey. but I am a bit cheddary, aren't I?
[9] <~> Bill Z Bub 21-Aug-03/7:56 PM Reply
cheddar is the single most popular cheese in the world, bub.
[9] <~> 21-Aug-03/7:55 PM Reply
singular or plural: decide.
"to be opened"--superfluous. can it. and "now"--nix that 2.

do a little more with the last line--maybe 'tumbke into your sheets'. it's there, waiting for you--go on, man! write the bastard down!
[n/a] Bill Z Bub 21-Aug-03/8:27 PM Reply
How odd. I try to edit this poem, and I get one of my other poems instead. WTF?
[9] <~> Bill Z Bub 21-Aug-03/8:34 PM Reply
weird. get k on it. although he ain't been round much, lately.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub <~> 22-Aug-03/8:35 PM Reply
nevermind, it works now.
[9] Caducus 22-Aug-03/8:17 AM Reply
The fat belly suits this beauty 9
[9] <~> 22-Aug-03/10:54 PM Reply
:)

have a 9.