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fragile (Free verse) by Bill Z Bub
Your white envelopes, arriving bimonthly, dinged and wrinkled from the journey, I lift by the corner with finger and thumb carry it queitly to the nearest table, lay it down softly and with one hand smooth it out so that it is flat and crisp and ready. sometimes I use one finger, and a fingernail, but this time I take up the letter opener, like an antique dagger and enter through the tiny hole where the flap meets the corner and slice. cutting slowly, with full attention, but firmly until the top of the envelope opens and with a slight shake or shiver, you slide on out. And now I take you up in both hands, unfold your sentences and tumble into your sheets

Up the ladder: Totally Hair
Down the ladder: To be discontinued

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.3333335
Weighted score: 5.0397344
Overall Rank: 6996
Posted: August 21, 2003 7:26 PM PDT; Last modified: August 22, 2003 8:34 PM PDT
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Comments:
[8] SupremeDreamer @ 63.93.100.227 | 21-Aug-03/7:39 PM | Reply
hrmm. Interesting. 8
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.182.238 | 21-Aug-03/7:53 PM | Reply
hh. cheesey. but I am a bit cheddary, aren't I?
[9] <~> @ 64.252.17.3 > Bill Z Bub | 21-Aug-03/7:56 PM | Reply
cheddar is the single most popular cheese in the world, bub.
[9] <~> @ 64.252.17.3 | 21-Aug-03/7:55 PM | Reply
singular or plural: decide.
"to be opened"--superfluous. can it. and "now"--nix that 2.

do a little more with the last line--maybe 'tumbke into your sheets'. it's there, waiting for you--go on, man! write the bastard down!
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.182.238 | 21-Aug-03/8:27 PM | Reply
How odd. I try to edit this poem, and I get one of my other poems instead. WTF?
[9] <~> @ 64.252.17.3 > Bill Z Bub | 21-Aug-03/8:34 PM | Reply
weird. get k on it. although he ain't been round much, lately.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.182.238 > <~> | 22-Aug-03/8:35 PM | Reply
nevermind, it works now.
[9] Caducus @ 62.105.119.105 | 22-Aug-03/8:17 AM | Reply
The fat belly suits this beauty 9
[9] <~> @ 64.252.17.3 | 22-Aug-03/10:54 PM | Reply
:)

have a 9.
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