Re: a comment on Chrystal lane swift want's me, bad. by horus8	28-Aug-03/6:41 PM
mean to the waitress? what the fuck have you started rambling bout? can cause: can cause what??? who thinks he's better-than [her]? note: i dont spend time harrassing a waitress, i dont tip with pennies, and if i do goto denny's then im doing it to throw around 50's. plus, their pancakes and syrup are what i consider to be a delicacy... white in front, black in the back? blah blah blah, i dont have time to play social games, i dont need to "act white" im not sure what exactly that purely idiotic concept is sposed to be, because i am white hun... soon i will have surgery so i can be greenskinned and be able to call myself a martian. being black in the back? i wipe my ass girlie, i might be a hillbilly, but i still have some pride... acting black, jesus woman spare me the crap. spineless? how so? ok, if im spineless, then dub me a worm. i enjoy eating the dead bodies in the local cemetery. Waste your time? your polishing rocks and growing white hairs praying for rain, doesnt seem like your doing much. respect me? WHY? eh? i act silly, tumble around like some drunken ape, know it, like doing it, and you continue to respect me? strange. i never thought you cared who i was, do all people have this delusional fantasy that i think others actually care about me, or who/what i am? pfft. smoothing takes alot of time.. times running short, and soon it will cease to exist. I always dream, cursed to live in the dream galaxy for eternity. Miss "dreamprincess".. just make sure you try to provide results in half a decade. ok?
Re: Open my bum Oh Lord (Museheart parody) By Jesus Niggerstein by Bachus	28-Aug-03/6:13 PM
ROTFLMAO ahahahahahahaahahaahahaa: My parrot is a real talker, and he loves the Southern Cross. He's a rebel. He's a General Lee. cut to- SOMEONE SHUT THAT FUCKING BIRD UP! the whole damned thing was a comedians masterpiece, but i saw this and started to cough, and howl with tears, laughter turning my face blue as i started to hear my voice doing a wonderfull imitation of this: "bwaaaaa horus wanna cracker? bwaaa horus want to shoot a nigger? bwaaaa horus want to drop a tab of acid? bwaaaa, i bite bitch, ill never stop chirpin" ONWARDS!!! NIGGERS ARE SLAVES!!! LONG LIVE THE CONFEDERACY!! KILL THOSE NIGGER-LOVIN YANKEES!! -gen lee storms onto the field with his jackass, holding his cock and singing the crocodile alabama blues- god, your a fucking hoot. 10! 10! 10!
Re: a comment on Chrystal lane swift want's me, bad. by horus8	28-Aug-03/6:01 PM
cool. want some paper? the spics donated some homemade salsa to add some flavor.
Re: a comment on Chrystal lane swift want's me, bad. by horus8	28-Aug-03/6:00 PM
yeah, but ive heard it 200 million times before.. its really irritating.. i start feeling like bleaching my hair, wearing oversized jeans that hang by my thighs, getting a nice ghetto accent.. just so i can start yappin NIIIIGER NEGRO, I LIKE YOUR PEOPLE AND THE AFRICAN AFRO, I LOVE THE RAP AND RHYME OF POVERTY INFESTED MINISOCIAL PROJECT HOOODS YOOOOOOO! i mean, hey, id be called a wigger, but id be allowed to say nigger and not be bothered by black "ganstahs" who need to enforce a rule that exists to shield their insecurity concering the fact that they are the bottom of barrel.. no worries, i would only do this when i wish to die, id dance infront of KKK headquarters screaming "WHO WANTS TO HANG A EMINEM WIGGER WANNABE??"
Re: a comment on Chrystal lane swift want's me, bad. by horus8	28-Aug-03/5:54 PM
i had an idea, how about we start a neo-nazi political group.. you know, just to piss people off, poke at the ole PC universe.. dont worry, my mind is simply wandering off into strange things.. its a common occurance with a dreamer..
Re: a comment on Chrystal lane swift want's me, bad. by horus8	28-Aug-03/5:49 PM
smoothing them over happens first.. thats why river stones are smooth.. i know.. im being a smart ass, forgive me, but i was hearing the voice of my boring earth science teacher.. you have a dream? i am a constant ever morphing dream.. you know just an inkling about this reality.. it can be very very rough. so, your going to stay at it? well: just pray for rain, add more water, shrink them stones to dust, and well.. continue that boring task.. me, im just going to be the asshole that provokes the sensitive pc diaper society into making me a martyr.. i hope they do the cross thing, i like the idea of feeling holy.. They are hurt by the way its used? they are devastated by a few letters that make up one word? its called self pity, its called a cultural grudge.. its their sick revenge, their right to whine and get away with it, always the victim.. if thats what it means to be african american, then thank god im a california hillbilly.
Re: a comment on Mercury by david	28-Aug-03/4:45 AM
Gravid: (Adjective) 1: In an advanced stage of pregnancy What, no dictionary? :)
Re: Mercury by david	28-Aug-03/4:44 AM
Nice work. 10.
Re: Saturn by david	28-Aug-03/4:41 AM
hrmm.. this is good.. just needs a bit of a tweak.. ill be brave, why not.. you can just shoot me if you think im suggesting something evil: Father bribes her with a yellow-white brooch (striped enamel, diamond, and ten glittery baguettes that dangle in a black velvet case.) She stretches up for the honey-pale token, to pin it onto her blouse, over a heart lit like a jack-o'-lantern. But Saturn lumbers off with its curio cloudbank, sky-tethers the icy shoal elsewhere, padding round an orbit just out of reach. ---- Not much changing.. just a lil touch up in presentation.. youll have to do any other spicing up yourself... i only do slight facelifts. Work on this, if you do it well ill give ya a nine.. for now, ill give you an 8.
Re: a comment on Not Real by DeadtotheWorld	28-Aug-03/4:31 AM
hence? ;P
Re: Not Real by DeadtotheWorld	28-Aug-03/4:29 AM
Hrmm.. i like this poem, despite the slightly retarded "life sucks lets shoot somebody" Philosophy.. But.. i guess im a sucker for it. Heres some suggestions: Get out of the cliche, get into the soul bring me into the universe of hopelessness hate and revenge, trasport my mind into the head of the crazed and depraved, show me the world of men unsaved and without hope.. with that stated: I Want to take out everyone (gerunds are weak use of verbs, dont use them habitually) With bullets and this gun. Crazy, Psychotic is what they called it. But thats fine with me, because their dead. oh well, my opinion.. you can always tell me to go fuck myself and i wont be offended. lalala.. blessed with 7
Re: Picasso (Limericks) by TanHand	28-Aug-03/4:14 AM
Tanhand.. dont try to out do me in picasso poetry, i can get lengthy and zone into the soul of it.. or i think so.. what do you think? check out my two latest posts. i bless this with 9 btw.
Re: I'm Back! by wEdible Underpantsw	26-Aug-03/3:19 PM
sorry.. but your going to be owned.
Re: a comment on To My Grave by Bonehiss	23-Aug-03/5:43 PM
lol. well, i was fooled for a moment then. -shrug- hows the killin?
Re: On The Floor of the Hospital by Fear of Garbage	23-Aug-03/12:40 PM
the writing here was banal.. dull.. it felt dead.. was that the intention? 7
Re: a comment on Trollop: A Married Mans Revenge by DreamerSupreme	23-Aug-03/12:32 PM
heh, well all his talk about murder and his goading me to get in on the theme just slowly worked its way into me, and i suddenly had the mood for it, so i put effort into creating a murder piece of some value.. or i think it has value, i am happy with what i came up with anyway..
Re: a comment on A Poet's Rifle by SupremeDreamer	23-Aug-03/12:28 PM
what the fuck are you mumbling about? eh? start them in WHAT WAY? aye? how do you propose i start them hrmm??? eh?? if your going to gripe, dont make some goddamn worthless comment like that without explaining your bullshit. ok?
Re: To My Grave by Bonehiss	23-Aug-03/2:20 AM
horus, you bastage, i know its you.
Re: Candle Lit Night by LuckyJoe	23-Aug-03/1:41 AM
no reason to fight the darkness - how do you propose to do this? i know!!! A FLASHLIGHT!! oooo i see two lover birds makin out!! quick, lars get the camera will ya??? i want to capture this moment for eternity!!
Re: Candle Lit Night by LuckyJoe	23-Aug-03/1:37 AM
ok, good, i like the first draft, but we must consider: GETTING RID OF THE CANDY COATED SUGAR FILLING!!!.. lots of shit here is not needed. Hear it sing, <--- this was filler.. closer <--- inserted just to sound cool? bad bad bad!!! This [dark] night {everything} [existing] feels right. [Allowing it to concur…] {} means: it might be better to get rid of it. [] means: TRASH IT!! man, the way im going, your poem will be a tap dancin midget!!! night is always dark bozo, ive been out of my house during the evenins ya know@! [Allowing it to concur…] wtf? stop being fancy, if your going to be, atleast do it right!!! i think you get my overall message.. i hope..