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Chrystal lane swift want's me, bad. (Free verse) by horus8
You can't fool me. you dream of drinking champagne on even taller buildings than what Indiana can offer, Or the pathetic Sub Orange county existence of SanDiego's elite charity ballers. You hang out with minorities, and assume that will help you obtain entrance into heaven. You are only as Christian as the material used to make your pink ultra slim tampon inserter. You dream of money and power and Johnny Depp in Cry baby. You swallow to make up for your lack of baby feeders. You are nice to old people, but could never picture yourself being one. Without finding true love. Can you save the baby bird that toppled out of its nest? No. Can you help your parents die happy and old? Or will you park them in a drooler home, and move on to better things. You worry about being accepted for more than just a cute litle daddy's girl. You want respect, but sucking off the boys basketball team is not the high road to China. Or that movie short cut. And it always gets back to the town pastor and the coach. The school nurse has a condom variety travel pack with your name on it. Daddy's shiny whistle Blows! Daddy's shiny whistle Blows! Bringing to your braceless mouth (now that they are off) Moby's pretty Dick, but you can call me Richard the III. I am the baddest boy. I put the sting in lemons. Just ask those two stupid niggers in the movies, Martin and Will. And they will tell you I am as bad and black as Florida State. I am the Albino alligator. You are a rotting compost heap incubating my good red eye. You, sweetheart are a professional bullet biter and it shows and tells for the whole class.

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Overall Rank: 111
Posted: August 28, 2003 1:50 PM PDT; Last modified: August 28, 2003 1:50 PM PDT
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[8] Don-Quixote @ 204.31.182.127 | 28-Aug-03/1:54 PM | Reply
i like. made me chuckle.. put a smile on my face.

So, just wondering, what did crystal lane swift do to inspire you to write this? did he beg to suck your cock so much that you became irritated to a point of killing him poetically? looks like it.

blessed with 8.
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 > Don-Quixote | 28-Aug-03/1:57 PM | Reply
Nothing, I just like fucking with 'HER'. iam only gay for money and on tues. and sundays.
[8] TanHand @ 207.172.97.177 > horus8 | 28-Aug-03/2:20 PM | Reply
And in emergencies, of course. 8.
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 > TanHand | 28-Aug-03/2:24 PM | Reply
You mean like malnutrition? Or splinters. Because, I get quite queer for hard boiled eggs and tweezers.
[8] Don-Quixote @ 66.81.156.79 > horus8 | 28-Aug-03/2:30 PM | Reply
Its a her? ah.. well, you two seem to have gotten to know each other.

tues and sundays aye? what street you work on? :P
[9] Bill Z Bub @ 24.43.48.67 | 28-Aug-03/2:46 PM | Reply
I give the first half a ten, the second half a 7. That averages out to 8.5, and I'll round it up to 9.
[9] Bill Z Bub @ 24.43.48.67 | 28-Aug-03/3:14 PM | Reply
But I'm still put off by the use of the N-word. Don't like it.
[n/a] Y2kSlamPoet @ 66.81.156.79 > Bill Z Bub | 28-Aug-03/3:53 PM | Reply
Oh christ, dont be such a shitty diaper.. no spine, no spine i say!
[5] <~> @ 64.252.17.3 > Y2kSlamPoet | 28-Aug-03/4:25 PM | Reply
rules are--unless you are one, you cant use it, bevause it's a flash point. so my dark-skinned allies would have me know.
[n/a] Y2kSlamPoet @ 66.81.156.79 > <~> | 28-Aug-03/4:29 PM | Reply
... ok, so black folks are allowed to degrade eachother freely, but anyone else that is white is forbidden to utter nigger, and mentioning "negro" is something that is hushed:

"dont anger those cool rap basketball lovers, they got nines and aks!!"

oh cmon z, really now.. not like im one that uses the word nigger much, but im not scared to do so if i ever feel the urge to..
[5] <~> @ 64.252.17.3 > Y2kSlamPoet | 28-Aug-03/4:55 PM | Reply
what i am telling you is what i have been told. white people aren't allowed to say nigger because they don't carry the stigma of it. in all fairness , i am not trying to be polite or pc, i'm respecting the unwritten rule as given to me by friends i have offended with my too-familiar speech.

apparently it can be a term of endearment, between people who feel they own the word, whether they want to or not. but i'm not in that club, so i don't have all-access passes for it.

my sister's a teacher--it's a hot issue. you can get suspended for saying it in her highschool, regardless of age or skin color. fuck, cunt, etc might not even get you detention, but nigger can get you expelled.

i think it's stupid to give a WORD so much power. but i'm not the one who leveraged it. i hope to take away it's import by letting it fade. 'mick' and 'wop' had that power not 100 years ago. it's faded now. nigger's been around longer, so it'll take longer to fade. so that's how i deal with it--it doesn't deserve to have power, so i'll take it away, one grain of sand at a time. i'm part of the water flowing over that big-ass rock.
[n/a] Y2kSlamPoet @ 66.81.156.79 > <~> | 28-Aug-03/5:01 PM | Reply
ah.. concerning the rigid stupidity of highschool: been there, done that, old news.

and about this smoothing over the river stones thing.. do you actually think your going to live long enough to see those stones become water eroded to sand? we are talking a loooong period of time.. and in this america where blacks still continue to whine and act like victimes, we are talking about a very soft running stream..
[5] <~> @ 64.252.17.3 > Y2kSlamPoet | 28-Aug-03/5:33 PM | Reply
yep. we've all dealt with that bullshit, closed-minded buerocracy.

about the wearing away at stones (NOT smoothing over at all)

no, i expect i won't livelong enough to see the effects of that erosion. but am i going to stay at it? yes. because it' worth doind. or, undoing, in this case. ignore foulness, and it putrifies. i'd rather do what i can to wash it away, even if i know i can't be the total solution. "i have a dream"--he didn't see it either. but he sure as hell set the wheels in motion.

i'm going to assume you do things you think will help, not harm, right? well, that's what this is for me. i could give a fuck about the word nigger. but my friends--they're 'hurt' by the way it's used. so, pour, y2k, pour.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.165.150 > <~> | 28-Aug-03/5:49 PM | Reply
smoothing them over happens first.. thats why river stones are smooth.. i know.. im being a smart ass, forgive me, but i was hearing the voice of my boring earth science teacher..

you have a dream? i am a constant ever morphing dream.. you know just an inkling about this reality.. it can be very very rough.

so, your going to stay at it? well: just pray for rain, add more water, shrink them stones to dust, and well.. continue that boring task..

me, im just going to be the asshole that provokes the sensitive pc diaper society into making me a martyr.. i hope they do the cross thing, i like the idea of feeling holy..

They are hurt by the way its used? they are devastated by a few letters that make up one word? its called self pity, its called a cultural grudge.. its their sick revenge, their right to whine and get away with it, always the victim.. if thats what it means to be african american, then thank god im a california hillbilly.
[5] <~> @ 64.252.17.3 > SupremeDreamer | 28-Aug-03/6:02 PM | Reply
you will please note that the word 'hurt' was in quotes?

thank you.

essentially, what i am doing is refusing to feed in to the victim mentality. i refuse to acknowledge the difference that skin color can cause. you have my respect until you prove yourself unworthy of it. end of story. i don't give a fuck who you are: i watch how you treat other people, and that's how i form my assessment of you. mean to the waitress? then you're a fucking asshole who thinks he's better-than. white in the front, black in the back--like h8 was saying above? spineless. don't waste my mother-fucking time.

smoothing takes a lot of time, dreamer. you still dream. me too.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.165.150 > <~> | 28-Aug-03/6:41 PM | Reply
mean to the waitress? what the fuck have you started rambling bout?

can cause: can cause what???
who thinks he's better-than [her]?

note: i dont spend time harrassing a waitress, i dont tip with pennies, and if i do goto denny's then im doing it to throw around 50's. plus, their pancakes and syrup are what i consider to be a delicacy...

white in front, black in the back? blah blah blah, i dont have time to play social games, i dont need to "act white" im not sure what exactly that purely idiotic concept is sposed to be, because i am white hun... soon i will have surgery so i can be greenskinned and be able to call myself a martian. being black in the back? i wipe my ass girlie, i might be a hillbilly, but i still have some pride... acting black, jesus woman spare me the crap.

spineless? how so? ok, if im spineless, then dub me a worm. i enjoy eating the dead bodies in the local cemetery.

Waste your time? your polishing rocks and growing white hairs praying for rain, doesnt seem like your doing much.

respect me? WHY? eh? i act silly, tumble around like some drunken ape, know it, like doing it, and you continue to respect me? strange.

i never thought you cared who i was, do all people have this delusional fantasy that i think others actually care about me, or who/what i am? pfft.

smoothing takes alot of time.. times running short, and soon it will cease to exist. I always dream, cursed to live in the dream galaxy for eternity. Miss "dreamprincess".. just make sure you try to provide results in half a decade. ok?
[5] <~> @ 64.252.17.3 > SupremeDreamer | 28-Aug-03/6:54 PM | Reply
holy shit. talk about a complex! listen closely:

I WAS NOT REFERRING TO YOU.
I WAS NOT SLANDERING YOU.
I WAS TALKING ABOUT PEOPLE IN GENERAL, AND HOW THEY TREAT OTHER PEOPLE.
we were talking about races, weren't we? what the fuck, lee? miss dream princess? come on now. you know better than that. dream princess! that's a fucking first.

actually, i don't give a shit who you are. i don't care how you stumble around. you care about the writing. you make decent poems when you try, you are fair when criticizing others. that. is. all. i. give. a fuck. about. here.

sorry you took it to heart. that's not at all how it was meant. i guess this topic was done a long time ago.
[n/a] Y2kSlamPoet @ 204.31.165.150 > <~> | 28-Aug-03/7:37 PM | Reply
I WAS NOT REFERRING TO YOU.
I WAS NOT SLANDERING YOU.
I WAS TALKING ABOUT PEOPLE IN GENERAL, AND HOW THEY TREAT OTHER PEOPLE.

well.. shit, i was confused.. this wasnt made that clear to me in your comment.. ignore my ranting then..

dream princess: oh cmon now, admit it, you laughed.. i hope.

"actually, i don't give a shit who you are" - i know.

hrmm.. ive been up too long, and delved too deep into my self-loving rant trip to the clouds.. tsk.

but tell me z, was it really that clearly stated in your comment? -shrug- i might just be delusional.. oh well, life goes on, lets pray, reveal our transgressions, and let the blood of christ purify our sins.
[n/a] Y2kSlamPoet @ 204.31.165.150 > Y2kSlamPoet | 28-Aug-03/7:41 PM | Reply
dont answer: yes it was clear.. im delusional.. sleep time is soon. meth needs to be tucked away. forgive me.
[5] <~> @ 64.252.17.3 > SupremeDreamer | 28-Aug-03/6:56 PM | Reply
here's a little treat for you, to lighten the situation:
http://www.moderndrunkardmagazine.com/issues/01-02/01_02_booze_rules.htm
[n/a] Y2kSlamPoet @ 204.31.165.150 > <~> | 28-Aug-03/7:45 PM | Reply
thanks.. have one titled The 86 rules of tweaking? might suit this situation better me thinks.. still, made me chuckle.
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 > <~> | 28-Aug-03/5:38 PM | Reply
What is white and black? Anthropologically speaking? Melotonin? The distance one is from the equator? The worst kind of nigger is the one that is black in front of blacks and white in front of the whites. Another nigger hybrid is the wigger and the chigger. Unfortunately easy money in rap music and drugs and pimpin' is all to blame. That coupled by white mans guilt allowing a turned blind eye. Their music is shit. rap music is fucking horribly degenerative to their whole race and mine. It practically proves the KKK right. These young black kids are into quick money, not working, being horribly rude and mysogenistic to woman, and drugs and guns, and now it's crossing over to other minorities AND THE WHITE KIDS!. That's about as niggerish as you can get in my opinion, and the jews are making a fortune off of it all in movies and music and what? We as white (or caucasians) are meant to still let it be this way and feel guilty about it? Fuck THAT! I'VE DOWN NOTHING TO THESE PEOPLE AND THEY ARE RACIST TO ME! So fuck those niggers and jews. I wasn't responsible for their plights. And what about the fucking indians? You don't see them hip hopping it up like a bunch of whining degenerates. In black culture it's about getting your kids out of the house. Who cares what they do once they are outside. Most poor black communities are full of trash and crime... Not because thay are poor but becayue they feel that it's hopless to try and make it better, because the man is holding them down? listen. I'm white, and I have nothing too. No one gave me an education, or handed me an inheritance or a meal ticket, or gave me some black guys job? So fuck them. They should quit whining and be happy they can slam dunk.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.165.150 > Bachus | 28-Aug-03/5:54 PM | Reply
i had an idea, how about we start a neo-nazi political group.. you know, just to piss people off, poke at the ole PC universe.. dont worry, my mind is simply wandering off into strange things.. its a common occurance with a dreamer..
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 > <~> | 28-Aug-03/5:15 PM | Reply
Rules? Ha ha ha. Fuck them. i will openly debate them, and their rules into fodder. That is the most ridiculous thing I've ever heard.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.165.150 > Bachus | 28-Aug-03/6:00 PM | Reply
yeah, but ive heard it 200 million times before.. its really irritating.. i start feeling like bleaching my hair, wearing oversized jeans that hang by my thighs, getting a nice ghetto accent.. just so i can start yappin NIIIIGER NEGRO, I LIKE YOUR PEOPLE AND THE AFRICAN AFRO, I LOVE THE RAP AND RHYME OF POVERTY INFESTED MINISOCIAL PROJECT HOOODS YOOOOOOO!

i mean, hey, id be called a wigger, but id be allowed to say nigger and not be bothered by black "ganstahs" who need to enforce a rule that exists to shield their insecurity concering the fact that they are the bottom of barrel..

no worries, i would only do this when i wish to die, id dance infront of KKK headquarters screaming "WHO WANTS TO HANG A EMINEM WIGGER WANNABE??"
[n/a] Y2kSlamPoet @ 204.31.165.150 > SupremeDreamer | 28-Aug-03/7:40 PM | Reply
its true.. more americans can tell me about moses, abraham and the desctruction of sodom.. but few can tell me about literature, and if i decide to mention calculus, im liable to get shot.
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 > Bill Z Bub | 28-Aug-03/4:16 PM | Reply
Let me see. You can call yourself SATAN, but you don't like the word nigger, and you're Canadian? i grew up in Detroit, La. Chicago and some other pretty notorious hotspots friend and I assure you they were full of NIGGERS, GREASY SPICS AND STUPID FUCKING REDNECKS, and i will ride them all to hell nude with nigger tattoed on both of my ass cheeks and the side of my cock shaft, and I will lose no sleep over it. I suggest you discover lenny bruce, he was a white nigger jew.

Words are a poets to choose as he will. You've been socially brainwashed to endow them with more than they deserve. My dark brown friends get a hoot out of calling eachother nigger all day long while doing the same music video over and over and over again FUCK THEM!, my Jew friends make a fortune off of exploiting the hell out of it, and me and you are still broke and out of the loop wondering what in the fuck we have to do to survive. Pull up one pant leg over a knee? Perhaps wear a band aid on a zit on my face and pretend it's for my brother in prison when I just have an acne problem. Perhaps I should instal a 200,000.00 stereo system in my 20,000 car with video games and dvd player. Or how about another jew made movie about white people acting HIP and black people acting kosher so we can all just get along? Fuck THEM FUCK THOSE NIGGER JEWS. THEY CAN TAKE ADVANTAGE OF IT, BUT WE CAN'T? We are the poets they are fucking hack rappers and jew studio owners taking advantage of the past. taking advantage of the blood of concentration camp victims and dead slaves, and they can say it? FUCK THAT, so can I. Whenever and however i want, and if you were smart, you would too. they only care about money, cocaine, cars and ho's, and it's out of control. So fuck those niggers and fuck the JEWS that are taking it to the bank for profit. WAKE UP.
[n/a] Y2kSlamPoet @ 66.81.156.79 > horus8 | 28-Aug-03/4:24 PM | Reply
amen to that. btw, ive been getting a good amount of fiber, ive been eating paper.. starving artist.... see, the jews dont think my poetry is going to make money, so they wont help.. the niggers keep yellin at me saying my work doesnt rhyme, and the spics.. they just keep asking me to pass the bong.. yeah, my life is in the can.
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 > Y2kSlamPoet | 28-Aug-03/5:40 PM | Reply
No it's not. You've got me, and I believe in your work.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.165.150 > Bachus | 28-Aug-03/6:01 PM | Reply
cool. want some paper? the spics donated some homemade salsa to add some flavor.
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 > SupremeDreamer | 28-Aug-03/6:58 PM | Reply
Nah, I use my hand, or a nigger jews face.
[n/a] Y2kSlamPoet @ 204.31.165.150 > Bachus | 28-Aug-03/7:46 PM | Reply
sounds great.
[9] Bill Z Bub @ 24.43.48.67 > horus8 | 29-Aug-03/4:36 PM | Reply
It's not the word itself, it's the hateful and purposefully denigrating way you use it. Not to mention the racist ranting. Yeah, its all a part of the artistic statement that IS Horus8, but its so full of H8. I don't get shocked at a whole lot, but this is purposeful and extended cruelty.
I don't use the word, not because it's not allowed, but because I would be furious if someone started calling me the equivalent.
But you live on a whole other level. You really live poetry. In comparison, I am a mere dabbler.
And tell SupineDreamer or Y3KScamPoet to quit stepping on your coat-tails. Yeah, go ahead and join a neo-nazi group as an anti-PC statement. I'm sure you'll have a real nice life.

And I call myself Bill Z. Bub for religous reasons. Or anti-religous reasons.
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 > Bill Z Bub | 29-Aug-03/7:19 PM | Reply
What's the equivalent? Honky?

Hee this might help
http://www.wikipedia.org/wiki/Nigger_(word)

Do you know how many black athletes and celebrities bitch about the stigma of being black, and how they've been held down by the man? 99%, it's become the excuse for everything. Do you think cops only beat up blacks and not whites? How come so many filthy fucking rich niggers don't use their fame, or influence, or millions of dollars to do something together educationally and culturally unparallelled? Shit Shaq, Jordan and Tiger Woods alone have enough money to end world hunger, but they only spend it on themselves, because, afterall, pimping, and showing off to ones main niggas is everything in their existences homie. Cars are REAL IMPORTANT Even that little ten year old rapper Bow wow or whatever has ten cars, and he's fucking ten. You got to have lots of upscale ho's and a multi million wardrobe. I can remember, distinctly once hearing two spades in middle school talf for fourty five minutes about 'sneakers'? So if they are being held down by the man (blacks). A poor black kid can get thousands of dollars in scholarship money and basically go to college free, a poor white kid however will not find that much grant money laying around, that's for sure. What is it called when a white guy can't find work, or when a white guy or girl is restricted by the system. What we got coming, or justice? Do blacks think that whites get everything in life handed to them on a silver platter? Purposeful and extended cruelty to who? Black people? Leave it to a fucking Canuck to have the audacity to imagine America as a home of the brave and PC, where even soon the word nigger will be eradicated? It's easy for you to ay because you've never grown up or lived in a huge urban project and gone to school with niggers that are so fucking hateful concentrating on school work is an impossibilty. Trust me my friend there is such thing as a nigger, and theyd be the first to agree right before murdering you and raping your family because they ran out of crack and got moody. And in prison my friend there are some monstrous niggers.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.175.3 > Bill Z Bub | 30-Aug-03/3:50 PM | Reply
Y3Kscampoet? scam?.. trust me man, i dont make any money.
And i dont step on his tails.. i simply talk alot, its my current disease.

Your taking all his negro hate and such seriously..

"this is purposeful and extended cruelty."

well, fuck.. damn him for being realistic.. yup.. bub.. duh.
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.130.62.63 | 10-Feb-05/7:26 PM | Reply
If I could tolerate beaver, I'd wear yours.
[10] edpeterson @ 68.79.58.40 | 19-Mar-05/1:34 PM | Reply
funny that this is your highest ranked poem.
[10] cpill @ 81.179.107.176 | 10-Apr-05/11:37 AM | Reply
Fuck yeah!
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