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Mercury (Free verse) by david
Hobnobbing around the Mercurian noon, with only a thin whiskey-coloured veil to waylay it, the Sun must burn carte blanche in the sky, growing white-hot and even larger as the day grows, spitting, burgeoning and flaring out at the seams like an infrared sunfish, gravid with roe.

Up the ladder: THE 7315
Down the ladder: pErFeCt pAiN

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Weighted score: 5.119203
Overall Rank: 5636
Posted: August 27, 2003 11:28 PM PDT; Last modified: August 27, 2003 11:28 PM PDT
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[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 27-Aug-03/11:58 PM | Reply
Ha Ha, there it is.
[n/a] Nicholas Jones @ 137.44.1.200 | 28-Aug-03/2:46 AM | Reply
What does gravid mean?
[10] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.161.103 > Nicholas Jones | 28-Aug-03/4:45 AM | Reply
Gravid: (Adjective)

1: In an advanced stage of pregnancy

What, no dictionary? :)
[7] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 > Nicholas Jones | 28-Aug-03/7:12 AM | Reply
www.dictionary.com

[10] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.161.103 | 28-Aug-03/4:44 AM | Reply
Nice work. 10.
[7] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 28-Aug-03/11:33 AM | Reply
the repetition of Mercury in the title and the first line unnerves me.
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