| Re: a comment on A Cacodemon's Sermon: Message to a Eudemon by Y2kSlamPoet |
1-Sep-03/11:55 AM |
shall be mended in my original copy. i liked that part too, but im very happy with my -toe in water- with greek mythology.. i might get really heavy with it.
oh yeah jurisprudence is me new word of the day! hows me vocabulary improving? -wink-
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| Re: a comment on goofy poem to prove I'm not morbid (Ode to an Onion) by greym0on |
1-Sep-03/10:35 AM |
yeah, i smell because.. -sniff- im beatiful inside.. but no one can see!!!!
_dark scribbles notes: "Patient is an emotional puff ball"_
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| Re: a comment on Peach (Revision) by http://mulberryfairy |
1-Sep-03/10:31 AM |
It had quality, you simply gave too much of a shit about readers who suddenly run from a poem that is a bit long..
bad excuse. If its too long, i suggest: tighten the poem to a shorter output, not to make it short, but to strengthen the delivery of the emotion in the poem.
if your really romanitc, you need to put passion into it.. I WANT RESULTS BECAUSE YOUR DAMNED POEM IS WORTH THE EFFORT.
heh.
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| Re: Peach (Revision) by http://mulberryfairy |
1-Sep-03/10:01 AM |
Ok, i like the idea, but i think you could have better crafted this into one poem with a much stronger impact.
doing the fancy splitting up didnt offer anything but a bad handicap to your poem. 8 for this one.
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| Re: Part I: The Peach by http://mulberryfairy |
1-Sep-03/9:58 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Untitled II by greym0on |
1-Sep-03/9:38 AM |
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worry not, i am a preacher screaming to any that make me feel the need to speak.. i speak, at times not caring what i say, which is most of the time.. for it matters not.
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| Re: Untitled II by greym0on |
1-Sep-03/8:05 AM |
you poke at things you have no insight into. you think you can jab at this? speaking of chaos, dreams, and poor therapy insight spouting the widely known:
"mommy if i was loved i wouldnt be like this"
Hah. wow. your rusty, and im very motivated. tsk.
im also.. CRAZY! im such a bundle of emotions just waiting to burst! hahahaha.
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| Re: Untitled by greym0on |
1-Sep-03/8:00 AM |
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not good.. tsk. skimming the surface.. DRIVE THE KNIFE DEEP YOU STOMACHLESS WHORE...
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| Re: goofy poem to prove I'm not morbid (Ode to an Onion) by greym0on |
1-Sep-03/7:56 AM |
I spit. I pop. I rot. I cause thee to cry, and soon the fumes of my evil peeled layers shall kill thee.
i smell someone who hides behind the moon, i smell a goon that wants to play a game i love.. or perhaps i smell blood that has not been spilled yet.. shall this veggie taste thy blood.. shall it flow as a large watercourse, or drain via the carved delta?
-sniff- my teeth ache for flesh..
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| Re: Burning your desert down by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
30-Aug-03/9:21 PM |
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| Re: a comment on Chrystal lane swift want's me, bad. by horus8 |
30-Aug-03/3:50 PM |
Y3Kscampoet? scam?.. trust me man, i dont make any money.
And i dont step on his tails.. i simply talk alot, its my current disease.
Your taking all his negro hate and such seriously..
"this is purposeful and extended cruelty."
well, fuck.. damn him for being realistic.. yup.. bub.. duh.
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| Re: New Horizon by Kitch |
30-Aug-03/3:39 PM |
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ok, labeled correctly, your the pimple master!
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| Re: a comment on Maman: Psychic Tophet by SupremeDreamer |
30-Aug-03/3:35 PM |
Correction: she isnt french. she is belgian.
and why?.. because she was born in belgium?.. as was my father?.. why the hell do you bother asking this question?
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| Re: New Horizon by Kitch |
30-Aug-03/8:14 AM |
this was sposed to be a pimple right?
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| Re: Australian Red by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
29-Aug-03/1:03 AM |
but theres a 300 dollar wine bottle that delivered to me my money bag: because after nearly choking on a toenail, i sued the vineyard and recieved 2 mil.
Now they require meticulous pedicures before any man, woman, child or monkey can set foot into the grape barrel.
Blessed with 8.
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| Re: Wit and Eloquence by Lifeboatman |
29-Aug-03/12:58 AM |
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Oh yeah.. btw, it wasnt that funny because: its not something i havent seen done 1000000 ways from sunday. im not being an ass, im just saying, your not being that creative with this shit..
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| Re: Wit and Eloquence by Lifeboatman |
29-Aug-03/12:57 AM |
I object to: the long space.. could have been slightly shorter.. that middle finger picture could have gotten more detail, you can call settle and ask his advice concerning creating images with notepad.. the fuckers pretty good at that.
"insults and bad ascii art are not necessarily poems."
jesus christ.. if thats the case, theres alot of guys that should be able to fly.
that aside, what got you to make this? hrmm?
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| Re: a comment on Lie2Me: Sexual Frustration by Y2kSlamPoet |
29-Aug-03/12:48 AM |
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hrmm.. i leave that for you, because, fuck.. i never thought of that, lol. damn you.
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| Re: a comment on Lie2Me: Sexual Frustration by Y2kSlamPoet |
29-Aug-03/12:46 AM |
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i think all your left with is Mr. Hand..
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| Re: a comment on The Mellifluous Sound of God: Musical Eden by Don-Quixote |
28-Aug-03/7:12 PM |
now, lets add some FACT concerning my use of the dictionary: mellifluous and phantasmagoric are the two new words i learned today.
melancholy i knew when i was 10. Maleficence i learned in the 7th grade. Xanthous is also another word that i knew before discovering the dictionary.
pretentious? tsk. you fail you stupid arrogant fool.. you want to know why i even bothered to write this, with that big fucking show off title? so you can do EXACTLY what your doing now. i made myself a bet about whether or not id be correct about how you would react: ive won 80% of this bet.
The nice bit about the moon, that was also another production for you to yap about my use of a dictionary.. i shouldnt learn new words, or try using them? does it fucking matter? no. its just your cute way to show everyone that im all about big words and looking my best, with my hair gelled, my hands gloved, and my trusty dark brown leather jacket worn cool cat style.
who cares if your code of the gentlemans upbringing endowed you with the knowledge of nice lil words? lets speculate:
mommy spanked you each night if you didnt read 20 pages from the dictionary 10 times over. Right? daddy was never proud when his son wasnt ruminating about his vocabulary.. im sure he enjoyed spanking your bottom with a need to discipline an unworthy child.
obscure? no, not really.. its plain and simple to understand, really, its not that confusing.. your simply skimming over things and highlighting phrases and large words, like the good english detective that you are.
moon mystery/musical eden: pure fucking crap created to see how well i could predict your pathetic ranting.
my picasso pieces.. well those were works of love, and no, this doesnt mean that picking them apart will bother me darkie.
you wish to reveal the "secret" (im not hiding, i have no fear, expose all that you think ive tucked away into my closet of bones)that i write to prove that i can do it like a master.. your a moron.. i dont give a shit what you think, theres a slight few that have any effect on me, and i never let such influences do much imprinting, but i can do better acting than you, thats for sure.
Your the man who has something to prove.. a need to convince folks of my retardation, fraudulant wannabe writing, and brown nosing social attitude.. also that im a hypocrit. all these things meaning nothing, for you have gotten NOWHERE.. nada, zip, zero. your my guitar.. i pluck some strings, you make some noise.. add some drums played in a unharmonious manner, and we have your sideshow amusement english punk rock. bingo.
now (excuse my Good Will Hunting quotes) HOW DO YOU LIKE THEM APPLES?
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