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Not Real (Free verse) by DeadtotheWorld Hate has raged upon me for too long
I've come to release this anger and doldrums
Destructive tantrums thrown for no reasons
The flowers now bloom on the wrong seasons
Darkness and Sorrow glistens in the shadows
Of non morbid tones of plateau's
Things should not be this way
It's all screwed to this day
Feeling pain and agony
Wanting to take out everyone
With this bullets and this gun
Crazy and Insane is what they said
But It seems fine to me, because now their dead
Up the ladder:
Forget it...k?
Down the ladder:
Birds of Paradise
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Posted: August 27, 2003 10:09 PM PDT; Last modified: August 27, 2003 10:09 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.9103527 Overall Rank: 9662 Comments:
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DeadtotheWorld @ 12.80.127.197
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27-Aug-03/10:15 PM
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This poem is about things that are happening and in which they should be the opposite of what is actucally happening, Hince the name "Not Real."
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SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.161.103
> DeadtotheWorld
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28-Aug-03/4:31 AM
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hence? ;P
Save one for you. "Hince", the outcome is unfavourable.
Hrmm.. i like this poem, despite the slightly retarded
"life sucks lets shoot somebody" Philosophy.. But.. i guess im a sucker for it. Heres some suggestions: Get out of the cliche, get into the soul bring me into the universe of hopelessness hate and revenge, trasport my mind into the head of the crazed and depraved, show me the world of men unsaved and without hope.. with that stated: I Want to take out everyone (gerunds are weak use of verbs, dont use them habitually) With bullets and this gun. Crazy, Psychotic is what they called it. But thats fine with me, because their dead. oh well, my opinion.. you can always tell me to go fuck myself and i wont be offended. lalala.. blessed with 7
Just one of those days. (7)
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