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Birds of Paradise (Free verse) by Domus
The birds of paradise show me their profiles. Standing in their shallow vase, they lean their heads out looking kind of stupid. Three thousand miles away, my daughter consumed an entire bag of cheetos. Unable to sleep or vomit, she called me in distress. So who is more helpless, these decapitated flowers or myself? Trying to relieve her suffering from so far away. I hear the hummm of the refrigerator; painless, an electrical appliance. While within me are the sufferings of a lifetime, unstemmed, helpless. I wish I could reach out and hold her. Comfort her pittering and sore heart. Soother her needless anxieties and sonstant affronts. Make it better...but I can't Beating on the door, but it won't open TO ME.

Up the ladder: Not Real
Down the ladder: Wanting

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.6666665
Weighted score: 4.9103527
Overall Rank: 9663
Posted: August 28, 2003 11:41 AM PDT; Last modified: August 28, 2003 11:41 AM PDT
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[7] richa @ 81.86.253.156 | 28-Aug-03/1:42 PM | Reply
flows nice, the pointy is clear. Pays service to a little imagery.

And your sister unable to vomit. Funny rats can't vomit either although the do feel sick if you inject them with saline.

anyway quite good
[7] Don-Quixote @ 66.81.156.79 | 28-Aug-03/2:49 PM | Reply
get a plane ticket? ;/ 7.
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 28-Aug-03/2:58 PM | Reply
"Soother her needless anxieties and
sonstant affronts." i believe there is a typo in here or two.
[4] Edna Sweetlove @ 85.210.40.85 | 21-May-06/10:56 AM | Reply
Quite amusing I suppose. Some funny little words inckuded which are quite funny.
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