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Wanting (Free verse) by J.B. Manning
I long to see your face To taste If nothing else The pleasure of your insult I yearn to touch your skin To walk with you To once again Speak of nothing and everything between us I dare to flow You know The words I need to show To you To me To set again my soul so free Walk with me into yesterday or tomorrow But never today Because it’s cold here And I much prefer the beach I am cheap You say Or want to say But not so much as the movie Or the play So you stay Away

Up the ladder: Birds of Paradise
Down the ladder: My Love

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.6666665
Weighted score: 4.9103527
Overall Rank: 9669
Posted: September 29, 2003 4:11 PM PDT; Last modified: September 29, 2003 4:11 PM PDT
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[0] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? @ 195.92.67.70 | 29-Sep-03/4:49 PM | Reply
Your poems have revolutionised the concept of boredom.
[n/a] J.B. Manning @ 129.44.35.24 > ?-Dave_Mysterious-? | 29-Sep-03/5:01 PM | Reply
as your comments have revolutionised the concept of an asshole. It's funny, but you manage to read every one.
[0] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? @ 195.92.67.69 > J.B. Manning | 30-Sep-03/6:31 AM | Reply
I eggspect you're just a bit upset that I didn't like your poem.
[n/a] J.B. Manning @ 129.44.35.24 > ?-Dave_Mysterious-? | 30-Sep-03/9:23 AM | Reply
No, I don't care if you like it or not, but you always manage some trite remark about everything, which I don't think is necessary. It seems that a lot of the regulars on this site are pretty freaking stuck on themselves or maybe you're all just totally insecure in your lives and this site is the only place where you can take out your arrogant frustrations on people, either way, it's unbecoming of intelligent people, if you ask me.Why don't you try offering suggestions of improvement if you see room for some? If you're such an expert.
[n/a] J.B. Manning @ 129.44.35.24 > J.B. Manning | 30-Sep-03/9:26 AM | Reply
...yeah and I notice my run on sentences for all you anal English purists...there's no edit button on the comments. So phtttttt!
[n/a] Joe-joe @ 68.194.57.229 > J.B. Manning | 30-Sep-03/2:44 PM | Reply
JB,

Right on my brother...couldn't have said it any better myself!
[n/a] J.B. Manning @ 129.44.35.24 > Joe-joe | 30-Sep-03/3:44 PM | Reply
Thanks Joe. It's nice to know that some of us are man enough to admit when we're wrong and move on.
[0] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? @ 195.92.67.70 > J.B. Manning | 30-Sep-03/4:18 PM | Reply
Eggsactly.
[n/a] J.B. Manning @ 129.44.35.24 > ?-Dave_Mysterious-? | 1-Oct-03/9:04 AM | Reply
Very funny...smart ass. And I say that lovingly. :-)
[0] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? @ 195.92.67.69 > J.B. Manning | 1-Oct-03/3:15 PM | Reply
No you don't. You're just being a sourpuss. You just wrote a massive ranting paragraph about how utterly uninterested you were in my comments. Does this sound like the behavior of someone who doesn't care? No, the course of action more commonly associated with someone who doesn't care is to do nothing. You are eggceptionally stupid.
[n/a] J.B. Manning @ 129.44.35.24 > ?-Dave_Mysterious-? | 1-Oct-03/3:37 PM | Reply
No, if you would have read my paragraph CORRECTLY fuck hole, you would see that I don't CARE about you liking or disliking my poetry. What I CARE about is your remarks. I value peoples comments for the sake of improvement, but after reading some of your so-called poetry, I realized that there is no improvement in your tired ass ghetto complaints. Same song, different drum, beating everyday in some tired old slum. yadda yadda yadda.
[0] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? @ 163.1.234.241 > J.B. Manning | 6-Oct-03/5:16 AM | Reply
My opinions about your poetry are entirely contained within my remarks. Therefore, if you don't like my remarks, you don't like my opinions about your poetry. If you can't accept some criticism, you'll never develop as a poet. I can understand your stupidity, but I can't eggscuse your arrogance.

Also, you can't make your comments more true by writing Yiddish at the end of them.
[n/a] J.B. Manning @ 129.44.35.24 > ?-Dave_Mysterious-? | 6-Oct-03/10:48 AM | Reply
Wow, how long did it take you to think that up? Whatever ?-Dickless_Mystery-?
[n/a] J.B. Manning @ 129.44.35.24 > ?-Dave_Mysterious-? | 6-Oct-03/1:45 PM | Reply
And I love how you, of all people, have the nerve to call me arrogant. The second most pompous of all raised noises on this site. Btw, Dave, if my poetry is so terrible, why don't you stop reading it. I tire of your constant swaying on the tip of my dick anyway.
[0] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? @ 163.1.235.200 > J.B. Manning | 6-Oct-03/4:43 PM | Reply
I can't help reading your poetry. It's like watching someone being mangled in a combine harvester.
[n/a] J.B. Manning @ 129.44.35.24 > ?-Dave_Mysterious-? | 7-Oct-03/2:01 PM | Reply
That's right Dave, slurp it up. You know you can't get enough.
[0] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? @ 163.1.234.241 > J.B. Manning | 7-Oct-03/4:53 PM | Reply
The pen is mightier than the egg.
[n/a] J.B. Manning @ 129.44.35.24 > ?-Dave_Mysterious-? | 7-Oct-03/5:03 PM | Reply
haha
[0] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? @ 163.1.234.241 > J.B. Manning | 7-Oct-03/5:09 PM | Reply
That was a real option on "Who Wants To Be a Millionaire" once. My cousin thought it was the real answer. He is some sort of genius.
[n/a] J.B. Manning @ 129.44.35.24 > ?-Dave_Mysterious-? | 8-Oct-03/12:15 PM | Reply
What are you talking about? haha was a real option? Interesting. I'm glad you shared that.
[0] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? @ 163.1.234.227 > J.B. Manning | 9-Oct-03/7:09 AM | Reply
No, "the pen is mightier than the egg"
[n/a] J.B. Manning @ 129.44.35.24 > ?-Dave_Mysterious-? | 9-Oct-03/10:15 AM | Reply
Oh, ok, well that's actually funny then.
[0] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? @ 163.1.234.241 > J.B. Manning | 9-Oct-03/3:36 PM | Reply
Well, if you think about it carefully, the pen is actually mightier than the egg.
[n/a] J.B. Manning @ 129.44.35.24 > ?-Dave_Mysterious-? | 10-Oct-03/12:01 PM | Reply
I didn't have to think about it. That's a pretty obvious fact. Since you can easily break through an egg with a pen, but I don't think you can break a pen with an egg. Unless you use one of your super powered golden turkey eggs.
[0] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? @ 163.1.234.241 > J.B. Manning | 10-Oct-03/5:47 PM | Reply
Actually, the humble egg has a surprisingly adequate longditudinal strength.
[0] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? @ 163.1.235.200 > J.B. Manning | 6-Oct-03/4:44 PM | Reply
P.S. Egg.
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