| Re: a comment on Down Home by <~> |
7-Oct-02/8:32 PM |
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Ninoy_Instigator deletes comments, in caase anyone cares/
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| Re: a comment on Trembling Worry by Ninoy_Instigator |
7-Oct-02/8:24 PM |
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it's not that i took offense at you poem. i take offense at katie's senseless kowtowing to it. i am blonde. and it would take a hell of a lot to offend me.
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| Re: The day I told her by dalva |
7-Oct-02/8:20 AM |
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at least you had the balls to tell her.
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| Re: America by little_angel_maria |
7-Oct-02/7:37 AM |
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you should talk to doug soderstrom. he'd tell you why.
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| Re: From a letter (never sent) by UnityMitford |
7-Oct-02/6:55 AM |
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i love it when you get rough, unity.
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| Re: a comment on love song by <~> |
6-Oct-02/12:06 PM |
like it or no, Nicholas, that is it's technical name. it looks like an 'f' in cursive, and it certainly suited my needs for meaning and innuendo this poem. thanks for looking, z.
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| Re: Bowing at the alter ego by flatliner |
5-Oct-02/11:16 PM |
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don't do it johnnie. i may be a zzinnia, but who amongst you can vouchsafe my beauty, or lack thereof? and therefore, how can you compare her to me, or mrs.g, or razor? well, i guess you can since all's fair in love and poetry... except for you, h, you tease. the mp3's don't work, yeh wee bastard!
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| Re: Sympathy for a Pig by phbiscuit |
5-Oct-02/10:50 PM |
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| Re: The big O by flatliner |
5-Oct-02/10:49 PM |
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oh. i thought you were talking about a different big o.
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| Re: A Gift of Beauty... by loneshadow29 |
5-Oct-02/4:46 PM |
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hey loneshadow--this has promise. i suggest making the language more languid. it reads stacato, and if you are longing for her, i'd think the words would be more sultry, more mellifluous, more dreamy. good effort, though. z
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| Re: a comment on Fueled hearts by INTRANSIT |
4-Oct-02/9:18 PM |
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| Re: The Cross Foxes by Gwyrfab |
4-Oct-02/9:13 PM |
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| Re: Haiku for Mum by waltfreakinwhitman |
4-Oct-02/8:50 PM |
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you dawg. you always crck me right the fuck up. nice job.
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| Re: whilst the bells ring by richa |
4-Oct-02/8:49 PM |
this is the best i have read of yours. i liked it very much. great, sharp rhythm, macbre imagery, mood, tone...
bravo.
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| Re: a comment on Life of a Cubicle Dweller by loneshadow29 |
4-Oct-02/8:43 PM |
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do you mean 'happy hour' by Limness?
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| Re: Life of a Cubicle Dweller by loneshadow29 |
4-Oct-02/8:43 PM |
okay, i agree with mrs.g in that you are off to a good start, but i think you should incorporate her suggestions and pare it down rather than flesh it out. you tend to use a lot of words, loneshadow, and you don't need to.
"Wishing I could be among the geese" says it all. there are at least 3 other lines tacked on around this one which are completely unnecessary--this one says it all. learn to cut away. this is a beautiful line. cut this poem down by half, made up of lines like this, and you will have a gem.
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| Re: Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof |
4-Oct-02/8:16 PM |
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methinks the flaw makes the man. well done, christof! ah, the things one misses when one goes away for a spell
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| Re: a comment on Cheap Thrills by Owner of the Sky |
4-Oct-02/7:56 PM |
the night is lovely in a ghastly way in connecticut; but i am HOME!. ah. nice.
now, as to this poem, yes, it is a good idea, but is hastily and sloppily executed, and so, it disappoints. free verse does not mean lax verse.
god is neither dead nor alive. so there.
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| Re: a comment on Down Home by <~> |
4-Oct-02/7:22 PM |
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Nicholas, as p&k has pointed out, i am 'the writer of triangle poems'. may i suggest you read my poems 'diminishing' and 'love song'? thanks, z
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| Re: Possibilities by Nicholas Jones |
4-Oct-02/7:13 AM |
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in your bow? or in your quiver? otherwise very nice. but that bit threw me.
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