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Fueled hearts (Free verse) by INTRANSIT
May I make love with you? Let's ride the black sheets passionately, and race those who challenge us! We will cruise our love endlessly, sharing the enjoyment of those cruising with us. Let us pause from time to time, and fill ourselves, so that we may continue our journey together with full feeling. Don't burden about crashing, and we will have the time of our lives. We will watch our speed and I will never leave you behind.

Up the ladder: A journey to the sun

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.714286
Weighted score: 5.4610424
Overall Rank: 2857
Posted: October 2, 2002 9:36 AM PDT; Last modified: October 2, 2002 9:36 AM PDT
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[9] gadget @ 206.150.0.254 | 2-Oct-02/10:57 AM | Reply
WOW
[8] knickytoy @ 24.45.19.89 | 2-Oct-02/12:18 PM | Reply
Born to run!??
[8] New Life Drug @ 64.175.39.248 | 2-Oct-02/6:14 PM | Reply
fire...
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.209.77 > New Life Drug | 2-Oct-02/6:44 PM | Reply
How many alias' do you have Mr. P&K???
[n/a] <~> @ 67.84.171.10 > INTRANSIT | 4-Oct-02/9:18 PM | Reply
that's not p&k.
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 152.163.188.7 > <~> | 6-Oct-02/8:11 AM | Reply
Well then, I apologize to Mr. oTEPdrug. Apparently I'm trying to see how many times I can step on my tongue here. I'm doing a pretty good job too, I think.
[7] Jill Stockinger @ 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1 | 1-Jan-21/12:00 PM | Reply
Sheets as a stand-in for streets did not work well for me--
Liked much of this!"Don't burden about crashing; burden doesn't fit well there- just use "worry" or some similar word, I would recommend. cute metaphor.
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